[DELETED] [NES] Milon's Secret Castle - "Inside Well / Towers" by joeberryosponge

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Submission Information:
Series: Other
Game: Milon's Secret Castle
Console: Nintendo Entertainment System
Title: Inside Well / Towers
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: joeberryosponge

[joeberryosponge]

Songs is at 4:38.

[Th3Gavst3r]

• The melody throughout the first page could use a dose of staccato
• By common practice, key changes should have a double bar line before them
• The tie from measure 22-23 gets lost in the staff lines, and is also inconsistent with the ties around it. Looks better flipped:
  
  
  To flip ties in Finale

  • Select the special tool then the tie tool
  • Click on the measure where the tie starts. This will bring up selection handles for ties in that measure.
  • Click in one of the selection boxes and press ctrl+f (command+f) or from the menu bar go to SpecialTools > Tie Direction > Flip

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I haven't checked for musical accuracy too well, but from what I can tell it sounds really nice! I'd say job well done, especially for your first submission!

[joeberryosponge]

• The melody throughout the first page could use a dose of staccato
• By common practice, key changes should have a double bar line before them
• The tie from measure 22-23 gets lost in the staff lines, and is also inconsistent with the ties around it. Looks better flipped:
  
  
  To flip ties in Finale

  • Select the special tool then the tie tool
  • Click on the measure where the tie starts. This will bring up selection handles for ties in that measure.
  • Click in one of the selection boxes and press ctrl+f (command+f) or from the menu bar go to SpecialTools > Tie Direction > Flip

  [close]

I haven't checked for musical accuracy too well, but from what I can tell it sounds really nice! I'd say job well done, especially for your first submission!

I have edited it to include your suggestions. Thanks!

[Maelstrom]

I need to be that guy.
This isn't performer friendly.
Jumping nearly 2 octaves at 150 is not really nice for anyone. In addition, the measures are squished, and feels crammed. Try spacing things out a bit and see how that works.

edit: Also, the last RH eighth in m24 is misaligned.

[joeberryosponge]

I need to be that guy.
This isn't performer friendly.
Jumping nearly 2 octaves at 150 is not really nice for anyone. In addition, the measures are squished, and feels crammed. Try spacing things out a bit and see how that works.

edit: Also, the last RH eighth in m24 is misaligned.

I just made the octaves more friendly, spaced out the measures, and made some minor modifications. Thanks for the input!

[Maelstrom]

Moving the lowest note up brought up more problems. You see, now the bassline jumps up instead of down, giving the song a whole different feel.

[Maelstrom]

[Maelstrom]

Deleted for inactivity. Feel free to resubmit it again if wanted with the requested changes.