[GBA] Hamtaro: Ham-Ham Heartbreak - "Hot Spring" by Altissimo

[Altissimo]

I think i fixed everything. updated

[Latios212]

Almost there - just some visual things:
- Bottom tie from m. 2-3: for consistency, flip to match 4-5 and 6-7?
- Staccatos out of place in 8
- Consider combining layers in 6 like in 2
- What's the quarter rest doing there in m. 4?
- Flip beat 1 LH in 3 and 7
- Incorrect rhythm grouping in last measure LH
- Is beat 1 RH in measure 9 rearticulated? Not really hearing it but if that was intentional that's cool.

Additional recommendations:
- I'd recommend a tenuto in beat 1 on measure 11 (and 19 and 21) to indicate that the beat 1 note should be sustained.
- Maybe tinker with measure distribution a bit since the last two measures are unusually wide. Could shift one measure from the previous system down, or whatever else.

[Altissimo]

Almost there - just some visual things:
- Bottom tie from m. 2-3: for consistency, flip to match 4-5 and 6-7?
- Staccatos out of place in 8

fixed

- Consider combining layers in 6 like in 2

in order to do that, because of the gliss, i also had to change measure 6 so that layer 1 was on the bottom and layer 2 was on the top. it's either that or leave it as is because the gliss doesn't go between layers so pick ur poison

- What's the quarter rest doing there in m. 4?

it wouldn't go the fuck away no matter what i tried that's what

- Flip beat 1 LH in 3 and 7
- Incorrect rhythm grouping in last measure LH
- Is beat 1 RH in measure 9 rearticulated? Not really hearing it but if that was intentional that's cool.

sure fixed

- I'd recommend a tenuto in beat 1 on measure 11 (and 19 and 21) to indicate that the beat 1 note should be sustained.

mkay

- Maybe tinker with measure distribution a bit since the last two measures are unusually wide. Could shift one measure from the previous system down, or whatever else.

k done

updated

[Olimar12345]

Just pooping in to say...

The gliss doesn't go between layers so pick ur poison

I'm fairly certain you can have smart shapes go between layers. Try it.

[Altissimo]

>pooping in

anyway i did try it last night. it didn't work.
worked this morning fsr idk

updated

[Maelstrom]

It's good. I just added a staccato to the LH in m22, and made it a 8th note.
Accepted.

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