[GBA] Kirby & The Amazing Mirror - "Candy Constellation" by Altissimo

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Submission Information:
Series: Kirby
Game: Kirby & The Amazing Mirror
Console: Game Boy Advance
Title: Candy Constellation
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Altissimo

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[Altissimo]

I've also been sitting on this for far too long lol. I'm not so sure it's complete? But I also don't know what else I can do.

[Altissimo]

bump

[mastersuperfan]

Why not just make m2-3 both in 4/4?

[Altissimo]

I think I did that because it doesn't sound like 2 bars of 4/4 at all but you might have a point

[Zeila]

Pretty sure m30/31 is (A, C#) (B, D) (A, C#) (E, A) (C#, E) / (D, F) (lowest, highest). Also at m35, there should be an F on beat 4

There might be some other glitches, but it sounds neat. Nicely done!

[Pianist Da Sootopolis]

I second the 5/4-3/4 condensation recommendation. It's slightly unpulsed, but that's kinda the nature of the opening anyways.
One other quick thought: At M. 20 with the flute part, you might consider a different dynamic Just a thought.

Cheers! Nice work!

[Altissimo]

fixed all the suggestions and made a few other edits

[JDMEK5]

Cool beans. Sounds good.

Measures 2-3: I would just hide all 3 half rests here cuz they aren't really needed. They just take up space on the page. Removing things like them make the sheet look cleaner.
Measures 20 & 24, RH: Don't use dotted rests unless you're in a compound (or hybrid) time signature. For this, split them up in accordance with their beat values.
Measure 23, RH: You have two naturals. Fix that.
Measure 27: Just a small thing but pull the end of the crescendo back a bit so it isn't touching the barline. Crescendos are supposed to be open-ended triangles.

[Altissimo]

fixed

[Pianist Da Sootopolis]

Random suggestion: fingerings for the thirds (except for the beginning because that can be taken w/ both hands), in places like the final bar, or m. 24-26

[Altissimo]

Most of the time I don't do fingerings since I've always been a proponent of "do what feels most comfortable" hehe. Personally I'd end up doing the run before the repeat with like 1 + 3 all the way up because my technique is horrible and I don't know what would be necessarily easier?

[Altissimo]

bump

[Latios212]

Quick visual things:
- Arranger isn't right aligned.
- I'd flip m.2 beat 3 RH.
- Move the rests back onto the staff in m.3, LH.
- The dynamic is touching the note in m.4. You could also try moving the staccato above the note.
- You've got an extra natural in m.23.

You also might want to consider using 8vb in m.19.

Besides that, everything seems to be pretty in order, nice job!

[Pianist Da Sootopolis]

Sorry, I forgot to come back to this!
Insofar as fingering is concerned, at M. 24-26, I'd go (in this order):

(2-4)-(3-5)-(1-3)-(2-4)-(2-4)-(1-3)-(2-4 finger substitution to 1-3 since you have time)-(2-4)-(1-3)-(2-4) etc.
Let me know if you'd like me to write the whole thing out, I'm just away from my piano atm (been doing this on my desk lmfao)