[3DS] Fairune - "Lava" by cashwarrior1

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Submission Information:
Series: Other
Game: Fairune
Console: Nintendo 3DS
Title: Lava
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: cashwarrior1

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[cashwarrior1]

Song:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=i9VB_y2qQ4w

[Pianist Da Sootopolis]

Nicely done.
A couple things, though:
- Double check your rhythm in M. 31; it's still the same ostinato
- M. 36: the ostinato goes up a third
That's all I've got for now. Nicely done, just a couple minor things to think about.

Also, one playability concern- you've got plenty of spots where you have long notes that are repeated by the accompaniment; this isn't impossible (it comes up in many baroque pieces where voices occupy similar ranges), but how do you intend this to be played?

[cashwarrior1]

I was thinking that when you played a long note with an accompaniment on it, you would just continue holding the long note after playing the other note That's how I do things.

[cashwarrior1]

Bump (Is this ready?)

[Olimar12345]

Still have some things that could be improved upon:
-There isn't a tempo mark on the score
-Many of your notes are beamed the wrong direction. In music, you want the beam of a note to be in as much of the staff as possible. Finale usually does this automatically, but due to a c/v think I think you did it ignored the proper beaming.

Wrong notes by layer/hand:
-LH mm.8 beat 1 is a quarter note C
-LH mm.15 beat 1 is a quarter note D
-LH mm.16 beat 1 is a quarter note D and beat 3 is an eighth note D
-LH mm.24 beat 1 is a quarter note C
-LH mm.36 beat 5 is an eighth note C
-LH mm.40 beat 4 is an eighth note A
-LH mm.52 beat 5 is an eighth note C
-LH mm.55 should be staccato quarter D, eighth note D, dotted quarter C
-LH mm.56 should be staccato quarter Bb, eighth note Bb, dotted quarter C
-LH mm.58 beat 5 is an eighth note F
-LH mm.58 beat 6 is an eighth note Bb

-RH mm.14 E should be a D
-RH mm.22 E should be an F
-RH mm.30 E should be a D
-RH mm.36 last three eighth notes should be G F E, not F E D
-RH mm.40 last three eighth notes should be F E D, not E D G
-RH mm.45-46 sustained A should be a C above that
-RH mm.52 last three eighth notes should be G F E, not F E D

-RH mm.5 second eighth note should be a G not A
-RH mm.13 second eighth note should be a G not A
-RH mm.56 last three eighth notes should be G E C

To help you along, here is a file with the corrections!

[MUS] [Midi] [PDF]

[cashwarrior1]

Oh, thanks for doing that! Hearing that bass is a lot harder than I originally thought

[Olimar12345]

It appears that you edited the files, but they look the same as before. (Was this a mistake?)

[cashwarrior1]

I'm trying to update it but I'm having connection errors. I can't get the PDF uploaded.

[cashwarrior1]

Updated
It was only the PDF that was wrong (by accident).

[Latios212]

Sounds great! However, there's a bunch of visual clutter to clean up.

- You can condense quarter rest + eighth rest into a dotted quarter rest in places like measure 2 since we're in 6/8.
- The top staff's too close to the top of the page on page 2 (and 3).
- Most importantly, I think the overlapping layers in RH look quite messy in places. Might I suggest an approach of this sort?

Spoiler

[close]

I know you have Notepad so you can't do all of these yourself; I'd make the changes myself but I'm kind of busy right now so I'll leave it for someone else to do if they have time~

[cashwarrior1]

Those last two I'm going to ask someone to do them. I don't know if I can move the top staff down. With the notes, I was able to get them to overlap and look good, but I don't remember how

[Olimar12345]

@Latios: quarter rest + eighth rest is common for 6/8 (and dare I say even more so than the dotted quarter). Either option would suffice as long as it remains consistent.

[Latios212]

Ah whoops, I kind of overlooked the LH rhythm here so yeah it'd work better to mirror that.

Anyway, I'll make the changes within a couple days, hopefully.

[Latios212]

Files updated!