[DELETED] [PC] One Way Heroics - "Death Screen" by deku_link

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Submission Information:
Series: Other
Game: One Way Heroics
Console: PC
Title: Death Screen
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: deku_link

[deku_link]

The song doesn't actually have an official name since it's just called "piano006" in the files. Also if anyone knows ho to convert .mus to PDF that'd be great, because that's a placeholder PDF since I couldn't find a way to convert.

[Altissimo]

In Mac versions of Finale you can use the Print option to access a dropdown menu that has the option "Save as PDF". If you're on a PC I think you'll need to download something like CutePDF or PDFCreator (I think those are the names lol i don't use them so)

[Th3Gavst3r]

In Mac versions of Finale you can use the Print option to access a dropdown menu that has the option "Save as PDF". If you're on a PC I think you'll need to download something like CutePDF or PDFCreator (I think those are the names lol i don't use them so)

Should be the same for windows. Where you choose which printer to use, there's an option for "Microsoft print to PDF." Hitting print after choosing this "printer" will open a save file dialog.

[BrainyLucario]

That's only for certain computers, mine never had that.

[deku_link]

That's only for certain computers, mine never had that.

Same here, if anyone here has the mac version please help a fellow out and make me a pdf version please.

[Pianist Da Sootopolis]

The PDF stuff aside, your arrangement has.. well, nothing.
With all due respect, you need to read the formatting guidelines and try again. You have no piece name, no composer name, no game name, no indent in staff, no page numbers, no copyright.. etc. To say nothing of the arrangement itself (which, to be fair, I haven't looked at).

EDIT: I was looking at the PDF itself, which is not the sheet in the slightest. My apologies. Critique to come.

[Pianist Da Sootopolis]

Double post to separate the critique.
Overall, not bad, especially for your first attempt, and especially for notepad. Keep working, though, because there's some things to improve. But still, nicely done for your first try!

   Formatting:
 - Mostly good, but make the URL read "http://www.ninsheetmusic.org".
 - Also, with all the notes everywhere, 8 measure systems simply aren't practical. Try 4 or 6.
   
   Arranging:
 - Firstly, the first measure should be a pickup measure.
 - The LH isn't practically notated. The chords make it near impossible to play the LH smoothly, especially if you try and hold the ties along with it. The stretches just as early as M.2 are a 10th, which is already pushing it, but it's filled in with other chord tones and a tied note that make it impossible to play for most hands (including mine, which are rather large).
 - An opening dynamic is necessary, and you could have some other dynamics.
 - For figures in M.22 and the like, with the sixteenth to the next essential melody note, use graces every time. It makes the sheet overall look cleaner.
 - Enharmonic spellings also should be fixed in places like M. 10. It's a little tricky at first, but my general guiding principle is to make it form a chord no matter what (even if it's chromatic relative to the tonic) if the alternative is something that doesn't form a chord. Again, not applicable to every situation, but in that given measure it's an A major chord, which should be spelled with a C# rather than a D flat.

These come up quite a bit, so take some stabs at the problem and post them to your personal arrangement thread, if you have one for your non airhorn arrangements

[deku_link]

Double post to separate the critique.
Overall, not bad, especially for your first attempt, and especially for notepad. Keep working, though, because there's some things to improve. But still, nicely done for your first try!

   Formatting:
 - Mostly good, but make the URL read "http://www.ninsheetmusic.org".
 - Also, with all the notes everywhere, 8 measure systems simply aren't practical. Try 4 or 6.
   
   Arranging:
 - Firstly, the first measure should be a pickup measure.
 - The LH isn't practically notated. The chords make it near impossible to play the LH smoothly, especially if you try and hold the ties along with it. The stretches just as early as M.2 are a 10th, which is already pushing it, but it's filled in with other chord tones and a tied note that make it impossible to play for most hands (including mine, which are rather large).
 - An opening dynamic is necessary, and you could have some other dynamics.
 - For figures in M.22 and the like, with the sixteenth to the next essential melody note, use graces every time. It makes the sheet overall look cleaner.
 - Enharmonic spellings also should be fixed in places like M. 10. It's a little tricky at first, but my general guiding principle is to make it form a chord no matter what (even if it's chromatic relative to the tonic) if the alternative is something that doesn't form a chord. Again, not applicable to every situation, but in that given measure it's an A major chord, which should be spelled with a C# rather than a D flat.

These come up quite a bit, so take some stabs at the problem and post them to your personal arrangement thread, if you have one for your non airhorn arrangements

Ok, I'll work on it for a bit.

[DonValentino]

Double post to separate the critique.
Overall, not bad, especially for your first attempt, and especially for notepad. Keep working, though, because there's some things to improve. But still, nicely done for your first try!

   Formatting:
 - Mostly good, but make the URL read "http://www.ninsheetmusic.org".
 - Also, with all the notes everywhere, 8 measure systems simply aren't practical. Try 4 or 6.
   
   Arranging:
 - Firstly, the first measure should be a pickup measure.
 - The LH isn't practically notated. The chords make it near impossible to play the LH smoothly, especially if you try and hold the ties along with it. The stretches just as early as M.2 are a 10th, which is already pushing it, but it's filled in with other chord tones and a tied note that make it impossible to play for most hands (including mine, which are rather large).
 - An opening dynamic is necessary, and you could have some other dynamics.
 - For figures in M.22 and the like, with the sixteenth to the next essential melody note, use graces every time. It makes the sheet overall look cleaner.
 - Enharmonic spellings also should be fixed in places like M. 10. It's a little tricky at first, but my general guiding principle is to make it form a chord no matter what (even if it's chromatic relative to the tonic) if the alternative is something that doesn't form a chord. Again, not applicable to every situation, but in that given measure it's an A major chord, which should be spelled with a C# rather than a D flat.

These come up quite a bit, so take some stabs at the problem and post them to your personal arrangement thread, if you have one for your non airhorn arrangements

Yes, everything is very very nice but..... 3/4?? o.x

[Maelstrom]

Deleted for inactivity. Feel free to resubmit it with the changes suggested.