[GBA] Pokémon Ruby Version & Pokémon Sapphire Version - "Battle! (Super-Ancient Pokémon)" by Pianist

[Pianist Da Sootopolis]

Done. Anything else?

[Pianist Da Sootopolis]

Bumpity bumpy bump

[Olimar12345]

Your page margins are all over the place. Check out the template file (you can even use it if you want).

[Pianist Da Sootopolis]

Standardized.
Just FYI, I now use the Template file for all arrangements (I work natively in Finale now as opposed to other software), and it works well. Just need to get this one done.

[Pianist Da Sootopolis]

Boop

[Bespinben]

Seems pretty solid from the arranging side of things! Nice.

However, there are some very basic engraving errors:
(1) Your treble staff is sized at 95% while the bass staff is sized at 100%
(2) Your tempo marking is floating off far too much the left. No published sheet I've seen has ever put the tempo marking anywhere beyond the left margin of the systems. Trust Finale's default position on this one: vertically aligned with the left-end of the time signature.
(3) Your arranger and composer credits should be vertically aligned with the right margin of the systems.
(4) First system indent
(5) You've set the space in-between each system at 0.79', resulting in significant cramping of space with the dynamic markings in m. 11-16. Give yourself some breathing room.
(6) The upper slur marking in m. 11 doesn't taper off to the correct destination.
(7) You reset your bass ottava marking for each system, instead of connecting it continuously.

[Pianist Da Sootopolis]

Seems pretty solid from the arranging side of things! Nice.

Yay I'm improving! Maybe

However, there are some very basic engraving errors:
(1) Your treble staff is sized at 95% while the bass staff is sized at 100%

Fixed.

(2) Your tempo marking is floating off far too much the left. No published sheet I've seen has ever put the tempo marking anywhere beyond the left margin of the systems. Trust Finale's default position on this one: vertically aligned with the left-end of the time signature.

Fixed.

(3) Your arranger and composer credits should be vertically aligned with the right margin of the systems.

Fixed.

(4) First system indent

Fixed

(5) You've set the space in-between each system at 0.79', resulting in significant cramping of space with the dynamic markings in m. 11-16. Give yourself some breathing room.

Fixed that system.

(6) The upper slur marking in m. 11 doesn't taper off to the correct destination.

Fixed in all instances.

(7) You reset your bass ottava marking for each system, instead of connecting it continuously.

Fixed, and the bass ottava now reads "8vb" instead of "8va".

I've updated the files. Also, FWIW, I now arrange completely in Finale, so my next arrangements won't have this kind of thing!

[Latios212]

I have some suggestions I would like to discuss sometime over the next few days when I have a bit more time than I do now...

[Pianist Da Sootopolis]

Sounds good. Let me know when! I'm currently fixing up a couple things.

[Pianist Da Sootopolis]

Lati and I went over stuff and I fixed it. OP updated.

[Pianist Da Sootopolis]

Lati and I went over stuff and I fixed it. OP updated.

This time, it doesn't look bad!

[Olimar12345]

Could still use some polishing imo:

-There is a clear silence between beats 1 and 2 in measures 5-10 in the RH, could you change those quarter notes into eighth notes with eighth rests?
-The dynamic markings seem to make little sense, and could be improved upon. Page 1 seems fine, but I'd change the second page completely if I were you. I'd make measure 11 (sub) mp, then write a cresc. at the beginning of measure 12 leading to the forte on beat three. 13 would be mf, then cresc. the same in 13 to the fortissimo on beat three. forte in 15, then cresc. at the beginning of 16, but only to fortissimo on beat three (like you have written). At measure 17 I'd put forte in the RH and sub p. in the LH, like you did in both of those places on page 1. 19 I'd put a piano marking in parenthesis between the two staves, to indicate that both hands are now playing the same dynamic. In case I lost you in all of that, here's a picture:

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-Measures 12 and 14 RH layer two half notes on beat three should both be an Ab above the staff.
-Beat 1 of measures 11 and 12 RH (both layers) should be up an octave, exactly like you have it in 13 and 14.
-Measures 17 and 18 (LH) should be the same as 19 and 20, with the exception of the upper B natural on beat four of 18 (as in, they should only be quarter notes).

Edit: spoiler tag fixed.

[Pianist Da Sootopolis]

Fixing. Will edit when it's finished.

[Pianist Da Sootopolis]

Fixed & files are updated.
EDIT: Fixing other stuff atm..

[Pianist Da Sootopolis]

Fixed everything and updated files.
BTW, @ this:

-Measures 17 and 18 (LH) should be the same as 19 and 20, with the exception of the upper B natural on beat four of 18 (as in, they should only be quarter notes).

I chose to keep the rhythm as it is to emulate the timpani line.