[GCN] Super Mario Sunshine - "The Manta Storm" by The Treble Bros.

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Submission Information:
Series: Super Mario
Game: Super Mario Sunshine
Console: Nintendo GameCube
Title: The Manta Storm
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: The Treble Bros.

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[E. Gadd Industries]

I hope you guys enjoy!

[E. Gadd Industries]

Oh, I should probably warn you, the PDF was a retard and started a new page unnecessarily after Measure 12...

[Sebastian]

Great work!
Some feedback:
-Don't forget to put spaces in between the = and 120 in the BPM marking.
-Instead of putting the staccato on the tie, you can just break the tie and put a rest there.
-The Dbs in measures 18 & 11 are C#s.
-In Measures 1 (and all measures like it) the Db in the right hand is a C.


To save you trouble:
https://www.dropbox.com/s/2u2roaq9s05sg3u/Super%20Mario%20Sunshine%20-%20The%20Manta%20Storm.mid?dl=1
https://www.dropbox.com/s/8nafrv3x63atczi/Super%20Mario%20Sunshine%20-%20The%20Manta%20Storm.pdf?dl=1
https://www.dropbox.com/s/vhu8hh7h5nv3r25/Super%20Mario%20Sunshine%20-%20The%20Manta%20Storm.mus?dl=1

[Latios212]

Just write out measure 18.

[TheMarioPianist]

Just write out measure 18.

Huh, that's weird. I originally did that because it avoided a one measure system and spacing issues. However, if you look at the PDF I guess the measures on that line aren't an issue. So yea, rewrite (can he get rid of that symbol with Notepad?)

[Latios212]

You have more than enough space at the bottom. Just shorten the last system that has only one measure.

Also please make sure the PDF is derived from the MUS.

Idk about Notepad, but you can do that.

[E. Gadd Industries]

It's been updated! Hope everything works out now!

[TheMarioPianist]

Also please make sure the PDF is derived from the MUS.

Could you please do this part (at least if it is ready for acceptance before I get on)? He has notepad and doesn't have CutePDF or equivalent (yet). I would do it, but I am still busy with homework.

[Latios212]

Eh, there's still more to change. I just don't have the time to go through it thoroughly right now.

Quick stuff:
- Don't use dotted rests in 4/4 time, and hide the rests in m5, layer 2 (or at least change it to a half rest) and move the eighth rest in layer 1 down.
- Needs a crescendo at the beginning.
- Try to incorporate the percussiony thingies in 16-18
- I'd make the 1st repeat section start at measure 13; this way you can easily tell that the whole notes in measure 19 are tied to something. This way, you'll also end up with all 2-measures systems (I think.)
- 1 and 2 repeat sections with a DS look better than 1, 3, etc.

[E. Gadd Industries]

Thanks for all the feedback! I will address it fully in the morning. But for now, g'night! I'm signing off for the night

[E. Gadd Industries]

The pieces have been updated accordingly! Hope you like them!

[E. Gadd Industries]

So, what do you guys think? Is it good enough for acceptance? If not, what else do I have to fix?

[E. Gadd Industries]

Bump

[Latios212]

please make sure the PDF is derived from the MUS.

edit: nvm just fixed that for you