[GCN] Kirby Air Ride - "Legendary Air Ride Machine" by JDMEK5

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Submission Information:
Series: Kirby
Game: Kirby Air Ride
Console: Nintendo GameCube
Title: Legendary Air Ride Machine
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: JDMEK5

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[JDMEK5]

[ThatGamer]

Yay thanks, though I bet I can't play it lol

[JDMEK5]

Lol the carnival section is a little tricky, yes. : P

[FireArrow]

Get rid of the octaves in measures 7-9 (they aren't really there) and add in the ascending lower voice (you'll have to move around octaves to make it playable.) Generally, I'm not a big fan of fluffing up an arrangement with octaves when there's other voices to work with.

[Tobbeh99]

First of: Dynamics, they can really add color to this arrangement.

Secondly: measure 25-26, I'd put the string section here in the LH creating more movement instead of just octaves.

Thirdly: Maybe consider adding some pedal markings. One section I thought about was the carnival section. You can put small pedal notation on the low notes to make them more clear. See how I did in my Wild Arms arrangement "Marsh Where the Migrant Birds Gather".

[JDMEK5]

Get rid of the octaves in measures 7-9 (they aren't really there) and add in the ascending lower voice (you'll have to move around octaves to make it playable.) Generally, I'm not a big fan of fluffing up an arrangement with octaves when there's other voices to work with.

Aye. Made those changes.

First of: Dynamics, they can really add color to this arrangement.

Secondly: measure 25-26, I'd put the string section here in the LH creating more movement instead of just octaves.

Thirdly: Maybe consider adding some pedal markings. One section I thought about was the carnival section. You can put small pedal notation on the low notes to make them more clear. See how I did in my Wild Arms arrangement "Marsh Where the Migrant Birds Gather".

I implemented your first and third points but I have other thoughts considering your second. My arranging goal is almost always to keep the original feel of a piece and while I would add in the strings, I feel like adding them at expense to the octave bass would change that feel. From an "everyday listener" perspective, I feel the octaves more valuable than the string run.

[FireArrow]

Suggestions part 2!

Measure 7-10: I meant in the R.H., but your way works too if you like it more.
Measure 12: Those 3 repeated C's in the lower voice actually go C->A->C
Measure 12-14: Starting from the high C there's two voices playing in octaves.
Measure 14-17: I disagree with your choices on voicing here, especially the omission of motion in measure 15.
Measure 18: Add some grace notes to the first F
Measure 19-22: You may as well try to incorporate the flute so the right hand can be as difficult as the left. :3
Measure 23-24: I like the idea of adding the bells.

Changes I made for reference, take what you want from it.

[JDMEK5]

Measure 7-10: I meant in the R.H., but your way works too if you like it more.

It just worked perfectly this way cuz the octaves are gone and I have the french horn in its original register.

Measure 12: Those 3 repeated C's in the lower voice actually go C->A->C

Ah thanks. Fixed.

Measure 12-14: Starting from the high C there's two voices playing in octaves.

I originally used single notes as an instrument profile thing but sure, it works better with the octaves.

Measure 14-17: I disagree with your choices on voicing here, especially the omission of motion in measure 15.

Yep, that's better. Thanks.

Measure 18: Add some grace notes to the first F

Aye.

Measure 19-22: You may as well try to incorporate the flute so the right hand can be as difficult as the left. :3

But then nobody will be able to play it. Jk I'll add some in.

Measure 23-24: I like the idea of adding the bells.

Originally I thought for some reason there would be a conflict with octaves but I guess not so yeah, in they go.

Changes I made for reference, take what you want from it.

Thanks a lot for this.^

[JDMEK5]

Bump.

[FireArrow]

It just worked perfectly this way cuz the octaves are gone and I have the french horn in its original register.

For reference, I meant there's no octaves in the right hand. But yeah, I don't see anything wrong with the way it is now.

[Olimar12345]

Looks good. Nice work!

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