Schoolwork Help Thread

[SlowPokemon]

Oddly enough, I've been taught (and have found the effects of) the opposite: use as many words as possible without dragging on for too long. Not only does it help to reach requirements for essays, but as I said, it can also give your audience a different impression of the way you articulate your ideas (in short, making you seem more intellectual ).

Suddenly all of your posts make sense.

[mikey]

Thanks for all this mashi.
And for the rest of you, is this seriously what you do? o.O

[BlackDragonSlayer]

Suddenly all of your posts make sense.

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[SlowPokemon]

Thanks for all this mashi.
And for the rest of you, is this seriously what you do? o.O

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*sigh*

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unfunny stupid picture

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*facepalm*



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.. ... *eye twitch*

sarcastic comment that's supposed to be witty

...........since I made a stupid point I'm going to pass it off as a joke or reference for you imbeciles



merely

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[BlackDragonSlayer]

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*sigh*

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unfunny stupid picture

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*facepalm*



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.. ... *eye twitch*

sarcastic comment that's supposed to be witty

...........since I made a stupid point I'm going to pass it off as a joke or reference for you imbeciles



merely

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This is the definition of a verbal caricature.


Though, I must say...

...........since I made a stupid point I'm going to pass it off as a joke or reference for you imbeciles

You seem not to notice that the "stupid" point was a joke all along, which is apparently why is seemed "stupid" to you (or possible some other reasons...). Especially so in this case:

(in short, making you seem more intellectual ).

[braix]

And for the rest of you, is this seriously what you do? o.O

Lol nope, not me. What I really do, is take any electronic devices and put them in my closet so they don't distract me, and just sit at my desk with my head in my hands trying to think of more things I could possibly add in. When I'm writing my *really long* draft, I think "quantity over quality", then I take out all the useless/bad stuff once I'm done so that it's just "quanity of quality". Then I revise and turn it in.

[Clanker37]

Though, I must say...You seem not to notice that the "stupid" point was a joke all along, which is apparently why is seemed "stupid" to you (or possible some other reasons...). Especially so in this case:

...Sometimes I wonder whether you have a brain...

[BlackDragonSlayer]

...Sometimes I wonder whether you have a brain...

*sigh*

It's futile. I give up.

[MaestroUGC]

The Dragon slayer has been slain.

Huzzah and hurrah!

[mikey]

Of course he's got a brain guys 
Did anyone else notice the eyeroll is ": : )" ?

Once I've finished with my second rough draft I'll put it up and you guys tell me if there's an improvement, okay?

[braix]

The eyeroll guy looks like a guy with sunglasses on.

[mikey]

Here's essay v 2.0:

Most of us know that colleges strongly recommend taking language classes in high school. A slightly smaller number of us know the many reasons why. And it's a safe bet that only a fraction of us who have taken a language class are fluent in our second language! Learning another language requires a type of abstract thinking not often found in common curriculum.  According to an article found on About.com, the list of colleges that require at least two years of language includes high end colleges such as Harvard, MIT, Stanford, and UCLA.  By now you may be thinking, "But what does this have to do with music?" The answer is that music lessons and classes should carry the same weight in college admissions as language classes. Not only do they require the same type of abstract thinking as language classes, they can be just as challenging, and music could even be considered a language of its own. As a side benefit, it can help you learn patience.  It can take time to learn a new piece of music.

Of course, if we already have language classes, why would we need to accept music classes?  Opening up more options for students can help them get into colleges they previously couldn't have if their school hadn't offered language classes or if extraneous circumstances had prevented a student from taking a language class.  Most high schools already have music classes so there wouldn't be any radical changes to schooling systems either.  In addition, there may be people who simply cannot learn a new language.  Allowing music classes for college admissions gives these students a chance to go to higher end colleges.  While there will be people who simply cannot grasp music that just means the solution isn't replacing language classes but merely giving multiple options.  No longer would students be forced to go to a second-rate college simply because they don't have enough language credits to go to the college of their dreams.

Alternately, some people may simply dislike language classes.  This leads to the same solution of giving multiple options.  If a class has the same core benefits with separate benefits of its own that class should be considered when colleges are admitting students.  On the other hand, if people dislike music classes the language class would still be an option.  At the very worst they could take the "lesser of two evils" and at the very best multiple courses with similar benefits would be available to take.

   Math and music are renowned to be heavily intertwined.  Both areas use the same part of the brain and thus practice in one can lead to a strengthening of skills in the other.  For instance, one of the important components of music is the rhythm.  It can be difficult to keep rhythm when you have a 4 on 3 or 3 on 2 beat.  It requires you to count in a different way than normal, and many younger children in music lessons learn to count from music.  Fractions are also learned when the time signature is explained.  In any given piece of music, a "fraction" of sorts will be shown on the far left.  The "numerator" of this fraction is the number of beats per measure and the "denominator" is the indication of which note gets one beat.  A 4/4 signature has 4 beats per measure and a quarter note is equal to one beat.

   Many of you who have taken language classes can understand how hard it is to understand the grammar and conjugations of the new language.  When learning music theory, especially higher level theory, it can be difficult to grasp exactly what certain things mean.  For example, a scale has 2 modes, either major or minor.  However, depending on the accidentals in the scale, the minor scale can be further divided into "natural", "harmonic", and "melodic".  It can be difficult for some people to understand the differences and implications of these three terms.  In addition, being able to "read" music may feel natural for music students, but students just learning can find "lines and dots" difficult to read, just like a bilingual Spanish-American student reading Spanish with an English-only speaker trying to learn Spanish.

   So why don't colleges accept music classes with the same weight as language classes?  Remember, many of the top colleges in the United States require two years or more of language classes.  That should be changed to allow for music classes too.  When colleges ask for language classes, they want students who can learn abstract concepts, have good memorization skills, are willing to work hard, and can work outside of their comfort zone.  Music classes clearly help improve all these while providing additional benefits unique to playing an instrument or learning theory.

   An important thing to keep in mind is the separate benefits unique to music.  There are more than just academic benefits to music lessons.  Playing instruments such as guitar and piano strengthen your fingers and forearms and help improve hand-eye coordination.  Playing an instrument can often be enjoyable, akin to playing a sport.  Learning a piece on an instrument can often take time and practice.  A music student who wants to excel will practice rigorously and learn to delegate their time efficiently.  They must also keep working at it if the piece is harder than they are used to.  It can also take time to develop a method for certain ornaments in musical pieces such as glissandos, tenutos, trills, and appoggiaturas.  To excel at playing an instrument requires patience and devotion.  This also opens up possibilities for students who are hard of hearing or even deaf (Beethoven became deaf and still played piano) or are mute.

So what exactly would be taught in these music classes?  Preferably a student would choose an instrument and learn the theory associated with that instrument, while at the same time practicing the instrument and learning how to play it.  Other options for music classes would be: composition courses where students learned a bit more advanced theory and used it to write and analyze music either provided by the professor or brought in to class by the student; a class strictly devoted to and centered around theory, going very in depth; or even allowing students to take private music lessons with tests distributed by a licensed individual.  Any of these would provide the same core benefits colleges look for in language classes.

   When college classes are asking for language courses, are they asking for things that can be filled with appropriate music classes?  The answer is most likely a strong yes.  I firmly believe they can and should allow music classes to fill in for language classes.


I know that the paragraphs are out of order xD and that I still need to add more real world evidence, but other than that, more thoughts?  Remember, I'm looking for content issues, not grammar or structure at the moment!

The eyeroll guy looks like a guy with sunglasses on.

B)

[mikey]

Shameless self bump
guys peer review is important.  My sister is dumber than me when it comes to this D:

[braix]

I just can't seem to find anything to add though.

[Clanker37]

OK, so I did some annotations. Is this for an English or music class? The comments I made were if I was handing it in to my English class.  These are all my opinion and you do not need to heed it, if you disagree.

Here 'tis it