[NDS] Pokémon Black Version & Pokémon White Version - "Icirrus City" (Replacement) by braix

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Submission Information:
Series: Pokémon
Game: Pokémon Black Version & Pokémon White Version
Console: Nintendo DS
Title: Icirrus City
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: braix


Replacement Information:
Links to Existing Sheet: MUS | MIDI | PDF
Replacement Type: Challenge (new arranger)

[braix]

[cashwarrior1]

yooo the sheet is readable now!

[goldenscruff]

Can I suggest F# in the last bar instead of Gb, because its scalic motion in Gmajor.

[Kricketune54]

Sorry for a bit of a wait here.

• If you wouldn't mind, could you upgrade this sheet to the latest NinSheet template? would apply to both the notehead style and tempo marker
• We usually recommend that if staccatos are on the stem side, to adjust the setting so the staccato is centered over the notehead.
• The measure spacing on page 2 I think works a little better visually as 4-3-3 measures per system, though I think it also might be good to move the final system of page 1 (m17-20) to page 2 as well (doing some evening out of page 1 spacing)

• m6-7, m14-15 2nd RH layer beat 2.0 should line up with the 1st layer notes instead of being a bit forward.
• m18 RH missing slur on grace note
• m18 and m22 RH you could move the 8th rest down to the typical 8th rest height within the staff.
• m20 RH 1st layer, last two 8th notes I would remove the staccatos as they are longer. Could also do for the second RH layer. You could also widen this measure as the staccatos of layer 2 are going inside the LH stem.
• m20 LH hearing 1st note as an En
• m25 RH I don't really hear the Bn in layer 2, but I do hear an F#. could replace Bn with an F# (also avoids the collision with layer 1 dot on the half note)
• m30 RH the Gb would actually make more since being written as F#. Given the song is in G major, most times the accidentals are going to be sharps. This change also makes more sense given there are no Fn's afterwards.

[braix]

Thank you for the feedback. All suggested changes should have gotten addressed.

[Kricketune54]

• m6 beat 1 both Gn's should be up an octave, and m8 beat 1 the Fn's (match up with m2 and m4). Basically same four measure LH pattern of m1-4 applies for all the measure until m17, and then again for m27-30
• Couple other smaller things you could address - there's a lot of empty space at the bottom of page 1, you could either distribute the systems a bit wider, or maybe look to move one of the systems on pg 2 over. And on pg 2 the system at the top of the page is a bit high relative to the header info (could lower it with a couple tabs down).

Gonna hold off for now but marking for myself later, some of the 2nd notes seem  a bit difficult in the RH, might look to suggest making some modifications or or dropping some notes in second voice parts where it's a bit too difficult to do runs and manage the thumb also reaching to restrike a pitch