[N64] Paper Mario - "Shy Guy's Toy Box" by Bloop

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Submission Information:
Series: Paper Mario
Game: Paper Mario
Console: Nintendo 64
Title: Shy Guy's Toy Box
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Bloop

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[Bloop]

Also a JesterMusician "replacement"

[Latios212]

Shouldn't this be "Shy Guy's Toy Box" (with an apostrophe)?

[Dekkadeci]

Listened to the original and your transcription (had to use the MIDI since your .MUS bizarrely wouldn't play back):

• The melody of Beats 3.5-4.5 of Bar 2 should be F-G-A instead of your E-F-G.
• I hear much stronger parallels between Bars 1-2 and Bars 7-8 in the original than what you've notated. I'd appreciate swapping out Bars 7-8's melody to the Bars 1-2-like melody instead of the line you have because the Bars 1-2-like melody is plain louder on my laptop (Beats 3-4 of Bar 8 is good).

[Bloop]

Shouldn't this be "Shy Guy's Toy Box" (with an apostrophe)?

tbh that was something i was doubting about lol
According to vgmdb, the normal English release uses Guy's, but on site we mostly use the English (Nintendo Power) titles which has Guys. I probably though too much about it and went strictly with the Nintendo Power version, but Guy's probably sounds more logical :p

• I hear much stronger parallels between Bars 1-2 and Bars 7-8 in the original than what you've notated. I'd appreciate swapping out Bars 7-8's melody to the Bars 1-2-like melody instead of the line you have because the Bars 1-2-like melody is plain louder on my laptop (Beats 3-4 of Bar 8 is good).

I personally hear the xylophone part a bit louder, but aside from that, I intended having the two different melodies here. In both two bars, the xylophone and glockenspiel play a melody at the same time, but it's not possible or comfortable to arrange that for piano, so I chose the glockenspiel part for the first two and the xylophone part for the second two (in the second two bars I added the glockenspiel at the end to keep some momentum going). Fixed your other point however!

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• Regarding m1-2, I think it'd be better to use the xylophone melody there like you did in m3-8. I hear it more prominently, and it sounds kinda weird to me to change the melody around within the same section. If you'd rather keep it that's fine too though.
• Maybe include a performance direction to play this with loose, imprecise rhythm. The original track is deliberately out of sync to mimic the sound of a children's band (or a shy guy band).

Everything else looks good

[Bloop]

• Regarding m1-2, I think it'd be better to use the xylophone melody there like you did in m3-8. I hear it more prominently, and it sounds kinda weird to me to change the melody around within the same section. If you'd rather keep it that's fine too though.

Yeah I still think I'd prefer to keep it as is for pretty much the same reason as I gave Dekkadeci :p I also think the function of the xylophone differs enough between m1-2 and 3-4 that it doesn't really need to be one connected phrase.

• Maybe include a performance direction to play this with loose, imprecise rhythm. The original track is deliberately out of sync to mimic the sound of a children's band (or a shy guy band).

I didn't really notice this at first haha, added an asterisk to the "Playful" with an explanation below the page!

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Sounds good then, I'll approve

[Latios212]

Just from the standpoint of quickly listening to the original, I'm fine with m. 1-2 as is.

Other than that, would it be better to flip the layers in beats 3-4 of m. 8? There's the opposing stems, as well as it's not clear that the voice from beats 1-2 resolves to the half note currently

Everything else looks good!

[Bloop]

Oh I actually had those the other way around at first, but changed them to this because I thought the resolving of the voice from b1-2 wasn't clear either, haha. Maybe I could try adding a half rest underneath beats 1-2 so there's an up-stem part and a down-stem part?

EDIT: Went with re-switching the layers and shrinking the noteheads of the extra part, after a short back an forth on discord ^^

[Latios212]

Works for me Accept time!

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