[PS1] Xenogears - "Stage of Death" by Static

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Submission Information:
Series: Xeno
Game: Xenogears
Console: PlayStation
Title: Stage of Death
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Static

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[Latios212]

Yess, love seeing more stuff from Mitsuda!

- Would suggest a double barline at m. 3
- I don't think the lower slurs in the LH beat 4 of m. 20 really help anything. I'd recommend flipping them so they follow the contour of the grace notes.
- I think the melody in m. 27+ (the accented C's/B flats that are sustained in the original) gets visually kind of lost even with the accents in the right hand, but I don't have any specific suggestions to alleviate this
- m. 29 missing a slur?
- Courtesy Gn's in LH of 33? (Maybe 29 too)

That's all I've got, sheet looks great.

[Static]

- Would suggest a double barline at m. 3
- I don't think the lower slurs in the LH beat 4 of m. 20 really help anything. I'd recommend flipping them so they follow the contour of the grace notes.

Fixed.

- I think the melody in m. 27+ (the accented C's/B flats that are sustained in the original) gets visually kind of lost even with the accents in the right hand, but I don't have any specific suggestions to alleviate this

I moved the Bbs to the 2nd layer instead. It's still a pretty busy section, but I think it clarifies things a bit.

- m. 29 missing a slur?

Yep, fixed.

- Courtesy Gn's in LH of 33? (Maybe 29 too)

I added them at 33, but not at 29 since it's already at the beginning of the system right by the keysig.

Thanks for looking it over!

[Latios212]

I moved the Bbs to the 2nd layer instead. It's still a pretty busy section, but I think it clarifies things a bit.

Good solution, think that works well.

Approved!

[Libera]

Yess, love seeing more stuff from Mitsuda!

Hey, I've got a sheet in subs by him as well.  It's quite different to this though haha.


Onto feedback: it looks pretty good but I've got a few comments:

-The rhythm in the last two bars is incorrect as far as I can tell.  The first four right hand notes in those bars are all on the beat.  Like this:

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and then the left hand will probably need changing as well.
-Missing a lower Eb on beat 3 of bar 26 in the right hand?
-The section bars 27-34 could really do with having the layer two ties tidied up.  This

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is probably the worst offender, but they're all varying degrees of messy.

Everything else looks good to me.

[Static]

I fixed all the things. I didn't add the Eb though since I don't think it makes sense to add on beat 3 of just m26 (or of any measure like it). I only want there to be multiple notes on the hits (beats 1, 2.5, 4, and 5), to better contrast them from the moving line.

[Libera]

I fixed all the things. I didn't add the Eb though since I don't think it makes sense to add on beat 3 of just m26 (or of any measure like it). I only want there to be multiple notes on the hits (beats 1, 2.5, 4, and 5), to better contrast them from the moving line.

That seems fair to me, I think I was misunderstanding the effect that you were going for.

I'm not sure about the offbeat bass in the final bar still, but the other edits look good to me.  I think it'd make more sense to just have the bass come in on beats 1, 3 and 4 rather than 0.5, 3 and 4 but maybe there's something I'm missing.

[Static]

I'm not sure about the offbeat bass in the final bar still, but the other edits look good to me.  I think it'd make more sense to just have the bass come in on beats 1, 3 and 4 rather than 0.5, 3 and 4 but maybe there's something I'm missing.

Yeah, that was just a mistake on my part, I forgot to change it. It's fixed now.

[Libera]

No worries, we're all good here!

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