[N64] F-Zero X - "Climb Up! And Get the Last Chance!" by Yug Guy

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Submission Information:
Series: Other
Game: F-Zero X
Console: Nintendo 64
Title: Climb Up! And Get the Last Chance!
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Yug Guy

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[Yug_Guy]

[Libera]

Something that isn't a replacement?  Preposterous!

-For the melody line in bar 29 I hear G D Eb D (all dotted crotchets).
-There is a guitar part (first heard in the opening bar) that seems to drop in and out of your arrangement.  For example, you have it in the first bar but then you leave it out for the next section (bars 2-9).  I believe it wouldn't be that hard to add in as in most places it has the same rhythm as the bass (you could just leave it out when it doesn't).  In that opening section it seems to play G -> F -> F -> Bb. 
-There's a glissando in the organ part leading into bar 26.  Might be a thought to put it in?  I think it might make the transition that little bit more flashy.
-I'm hearing the organ line in bars 22-25 a third higher than you've written it.  i.e. D -> Eb -> Eb -> F.
-The run in the bass at the end of bar 9 I'm hearing as Eb Db C Bb Ab G rather than En Eb Dn C Bb Ab.

I think that's everything in terms of notes.  I have got one other suggestion which is to add a little bit of dynamic variety into the piece.  You have a build up from 18-25 which I think personally think would benefit with at least an mp -> f crescendo.

I'll have another look over once you've made some fixes.

[Yug_Guy]

Something that isn't a replacement?  Preposterous!

Blasphemous, I know.

-For the melody line in bar 29 I hear G D Eb D (all dotted crotchets).
-There's a glissando in the organ part leading into bar 26.  Might be a thought to put it in?  I think it might make the transition that little bit more flashy.
-The run in the bass at the end of bar 9 I'm hearing as Eb Db C Bb Ab G rather than En Eb Dn C Bb Ab.

Fixed.

-I'm hearing the organ line in bars 22-25 a third higher than you've written it.  i.e. D -> Eb -> Eb -> F.

It's probably harmonized a third up, then. Give it a listen & tell me what you think.

-There is a guitar part (first heard in the opening bar) that seems to drop in and out of your arrangement.  For example, you have it in the first bar but then you leave it out for the next section (bars 2-9).  I believe it wouldn't be that hard to add in as in most places it has the same rhythm as the bass (you could just leave it out when it doesn't).  In that opening section it seems to play G -> F -> F -> Bb. 

The reason I have the bass doubled an octave up is to try and mimic (or at the very least, account for) the guitar part, since I wasn't sure if I could fit it in or not. When you say G->F->etc., are the notes your suggesting in between the octaves? Cause if so, I'll add them.

I think that's everything in terms of notes.  I have got one other suggestion which is to add a little bit of dynamic variety into the piece.  You have a build up from 18-25 which I think personally think would benefit with at least an mp -> f crescendo.

I know, but the original just stays kinda static the entire time, and I'd rather emulate what the original is doing.

[Libera]

It's probably harmonized a third up, then. Give it a listen & tell me what you think.

Sounds fine to me.

The reason I have the bass doubled an octave up is to try and mimic (or at the very least, account for) the guitar part, since I wasn't sure if I could fit it in or not. When you say G->F->etc., are the notes your suggesting in between the octaves? Cause if so, I'll add them. 

It changes notes every two bars there.  Listen out for it and you'll know what I mean.  (And yes you could probably fit those in between the octaves to make sort of power chords).

I know, but the original just stays kinda static the entire time, and I'd rather emulate what the original is doing.

I agree, but in the piece they add in more instruments as it goes which is not something we can really do on a piano.  My thoughts were replicate this with a crescendo, but if you'd prefer to keep it at the same tempo dynamic (tempo!?) then I'll respect that decision.

Also I've noticed that you've got a misaligned note in bar 11 (the C#).  ALSO also for some reasons the ties in bar 6 and 8 seem to disappear during playback.  I have no idea what causes this but since they appear on the pdf this a minor issue.  (Still interested in what's causing it though.)

Good work, this is looking nice.

Edit:  Whoops I hate to edit feedback into a post, but could you also think about the system distribution?  The first page looks pretty cramped and you've got quite a bit of space on the second page.  I'd move one system from the first page to the second and then you can move the title and composer/arranger info down a little.

[Yug_Guy]

It changes notes every two bars there.  Listen out for it and you'll know what I mean.  (And yes you could probably fit those in between the octaves to make sort of power chords)

Discussed over Discord. tl;dr - I'd prefer to keep it the way it is, but if other updaters want me to change it, then I probably will.

Also I've noticed that you've got a misaligned note in bar 11 (the C#).

Fixed

ALSO also for some reasons the ties in bar 6 and 8 seem to disappear during playback.  I have no idea what causes this but since they appear on the pdf this a minor issue.  (Still interested in what's causing it though.)

I've always had that happen in Finale playback and idk what's causing it. If anyone has any idea, please let me know.

Edit:  Whoops I hate to edit feedback into a post, but could you also think about the system distribution?  The first page looks pretty cramped and you've got quite a bit of space on the second page.  I'd move one system from the first page to the second and then you can move the title and composer/arranger info down a little.

lol edit away. Also, fixed.

[Libera]

I hate to be nitpicky, but on the first page you could decrease the space between systems and move them all down a bit.  At the moment the title and composer etc. are feeling a bit claustrophobic.

[Yug_Guy]

Done.

[Libera]

Sweet.

[Latios212]

I think the dotted half in m. 9 should also be an Eb.

I'd also suggest using G# instead of Ab in m. 24.

Other than that, looks great!

[Yug_Guy]

I think the dotted half in m. 9 should also be an Eb.
I'd also suggest using G# instead of Ab in m. 24.

That's fair. Fixed & updated.

[Latios212]

yayay

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