[GBA] Pokémon Ruby Version & Pokémon Sapphire Version - "Sealed Chamber (Duet)" by JDMEK5

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Submission Information:
Series: Pokémon
Game: Pokémon Ruby Version & Pokémon Sapphire Version
Console: Game Boy Advance
Title: Sealed Chamber
Instrumentation Piano Duet
Arranger: JDMEK5

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[JDMEK5]

[JDMEK5]

Revised with Latios for enharmonic spellings and playability. Clearer directions included.

[Sebastian]

Nice job! Some things:
- The notes you have ( (a) (b) (c) ) seem a bit hidden, especially the ones on pages 2 & 3. Maybe you could move them up a bit?
- The slur in M. 27 is colliding with the accidental.
- The finger numbers are scrunched in some places (M. 17 & 21-24, for example). They're semi-colliding in some spots, too.
- The 8va is colliding with the stem in M. 10. Also with the finger number in M. 11.
- Places like M. 4 (and similar) where the finger numbers are shrouded by the staff lines, I would move those up above the staff.
- The mp is in an awkarward spot (M. 13). Same with the F in M. 17.
- I'd recommend slurs on the grace notes in M. 26 & 28.

[JDMEK5]

I've fixed most of your comments, though on one or two I have other thoughts:

- Fixed
- Personally I don't see a big deal about ties colliding with accidentals. In this case in particular it looks like just a bit too much effort to avoid them crossing. That being said, I did fix it so they no longer touch.
- Good call with the fingerings
- Moved 8vas up
- Again, I don't see a problem with this, though in most instances in this score, it did make it look cleaner, so I like it. Good call.
- Moved dynamics for you
- No thanks. Just because it's one of Olimar's personal rules doesn't mean it has to be mine (not that I'm suggesting that's what you're insinuating; I'm just trying to sound dramatic lol). I don't want these to have the slide connotation to them or a rolling connotation. The grace notes here are individuals of their own, not accents to the following note.

Also while I was at it, I revised the system spacing a bit. More efficient use of space.

[Latios212]

Yay finally fixed haha

I approve here

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