[NDS] Magical Starsign - "Final Boss (vs. Shadra and Umbra)" by LifeMushroom

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Submission Information:
Series: Other
Game: Magical Starsign
Console: Nintendo DS
Title: Final Boss (vs. Shadra and Umbra)
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: LifeMushroom

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[Bespinben]

Good first arrangement! I noticed a few things though:

*The first 8 measures of the song don't quite match with your sheet. I don't hear a 2nd voice until measure 9. I think some of the notes are different too. Besides that, I think your arrangement, as far as the transcription goes, is fine. Just fix up the first 8 measures.
*The bass, all the way until m. 25, is consistently walking in deep ledger line territory. I know Notepad doesn't let you put in ottava markings (8va, 8vb, 15ma, etc.), but one thing you can do is import a sheet that has that into Notepad, and then just copypaste it into your sheet. Or, if you want, I can just handle that for you, but I would prefer you do the first option
*Measure numbers would be nice
*Look really carefully again through the formatting guidelines. You're really close, but you need to bold the song title and the composer
*The "pno." abbreviation marking each staff is a bit redundant. That's really only a thing for orchestral sheets, so I'd recommend removing it.

(Could someone look over the accidentals? I feel like some of those Ab's should be G#s [raised 7th of harmonic minor]), but since the LH is an ostinato it would make the most sense to keep the spelling consistent throughout, not writing Ab in one measure in G# in the next)

[LifeMushroom]

Good first arrangement! I noticed a few things though:

*The first 8 measures of the song don't quite match with your sheet. I don't hear a 2nd voice until measure 9. I think some of the notes are different too. Besides that, I think your arrangement, as far as the transcription goes, is fine. Just fix up the first 8 measures.
*The bass, all the way until m. 25, is consistently walking in deep ledger line territory. I know Notepad doesn't let you put in ottava markings (8va, 8vb, 15ma, etc.), but one thing you can do is import a sheet that has that into Notepad, and then just copypaste it into your sheet. Or, if you want, I can just handle that for you, but I would prefer you do the first option
*Measure numbers would be nice
*Look really carefully again through the formatting guidelines. You're really close, but you need to bold the song title and the composer
*The "pno." abbreviation marking each staff is a bit redundant. That's really only a thing for orchestral sheets, so I'd recommend removing it.

(Could someone look over the accidentals? I feel like some of those Ab's should be G#s [raised 7th of harmonic minor]), but since the LH is an ostinato it would make the most sense to keep the spelling consistent throughout, not writing Ab in one measure in G# in the next)

Thanks! I fixed the first thing (the chords until m9) and the formatting guidelines. Can someone please edit my doc to put in the 8va stuff, measure numbers, and remove the pno abbreviation? They're not available in Notepad. Thanks! Re-uploaded the stuff that I could fix.

[Bespinben]

Can someone please edit my doc to put in the 8va stuff, measure numbers, and remove the pno abbreviation?

Sure thing! Also, I took the liberty to put the first 8 measures in the right octave. You were right about keeping the 2nd voice after all! I just had to listen more closely. I also thought Allegro Moderato was a bit more fitting tempo (you had it marked 88). Threw in some phrase markings too:

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If you think everything's good, just update the files for the submission and we'll call it a wrap.

(One more thing. A lot of the OSTs I ran through to check this song called this "Shadra" [which must be the name of the final boss?]. So maybe have the title something like Final Boss (Shadra)? I couldn't find anything official.)

[Xaoz]

I like the sheet because I think could actually play this

[LifeMushroom]

There we go! All ready. Thanks!
I also edited the title of the piece, as there's one more boss with this music.

[Bespinben]

Awesome. Accepted!