[SW] Xenoblade Chronicles 2 - "One Last You" by JZ

Started by Zeta, December 19, 2023, 07:17:39 PM

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Zeta

Submission Information:

Series: Xeno
Game: Xenoblade Chronicles 2
Console: Nintendo Switch
Title: One Last You
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: JZ

MomoQca


I struggled a bit on the placement of the lyrics as they tended to clash with many things. It is not perfect.

As always, feedback is appreciated. Have a great day!

Latios212

I appreciate the effort to get a sheet for this song on site ;D (Side note, your lead sheets for the Xeno songs have been fun for me to play around with, so thanks!)

Just skimming for now, but one thing I would like to suggest. Notating pitch bends makes sense for writing vocal lines, but not as much for piano. You can't smoothly pitch bend on piano, so I feel like the extra note strikes feel intrusive rather than helpful, as if you're adding more syllables artificially. The melody line on piano feels more faithful to me without the pitch bends in it, more similar to how the other piano arrangement does it. What do you think?

also I'm confused why Jen Bird has a (s) at the end
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Kricketune54

Bump for arranger, it seems Latios has left you some comments here and was looking for your thoughts

MomoQca

Hi! Sorry for the wait. I just wanted to prioritize my other sheet for the update. Now that it is on-site, I can shift my focus back to this one.

That being said, I'm currently out of town. I intend to get back to this as soon as I can. :)

MomoQca

Sorry, this took so long!

Files have been updated per Latios' comments. (Btw, I'm glad you like the lead sheets! Still have a few more songs to add to the catalogue haha)

General changes to the sheet:
-Measure system-wise, the previous file felt cluttered. Decreased to 2 measures per system (not all of them)
-Revamped most of the LH part
-Added guitar voice (m2-4), piano chords (m7, 9, 10, 13, etc.), strings (m27-29, 68, 69, etc.)
-Guitar solo (m60-67) has been tweaked a bit to be more pianistic

Kricketune54

Okay have some comments to add here! There's a lot to eventually go through, so I'm going to start kind of small for now. The systems look good at a glance two measures per system overall seems to work well. Have not had a chance to look at rest of additions you made

• m1 LH I hear the low Dn held up to beat 2.5 - so on beat 2.75 I hear an En for 16th note length.
• Hearing same length for the F# on beat 3.0, with a Dn on beat 4.75.
• m1 RH I think the An on 3.0 would look a little better in the lower staff - the progression from Dn to An looks weird atm from 2.75 to 3.0. Maybe do some cross stave between 4.0 and 4.5? Have 4.0 in the lower staff, and 4.5 in the upper one, lmk if you need an image for this.
• m2 LH I hear the G held for a half note and an 8th note length. But beat 3.5 is a Dn, followed by a Bb and F# on 4.0 and 4.5
• In m3 and m4 LH, hearing similar rhythms... I would relisten to these as it seems like you might not have heard some notes that are present in the bass part
• m14 and m82 my experience with lyrical arrangements is a little low, but general rule to follow, there should not be words colliding within noteheads, stems, or cresc's. I would suggest  moving the lyrics down a bit in the m13-15 system to avoid the note stem in m14, and widening m82 a little for the cresc.

MomoQca

Hi! Thanks for taking the time to tackle this long and complex song. Everything you've pointed out has been addressed.