[GBC] Wario Land 3 - "Colossal Hole, Cave of Flames" (Replacement) by Nine Lives

[Zeta]

Submission Information:
Series: Super Mario
Game: Wario Land 3
Console: Game Boy Color
Title: Colossal Hole, Cave of Flames
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Nine Lives


Replacement Information:
Links to Existing Sheet: MUS | MIDI | PDF
Replacement Type: Challenge (new arranger)

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[NineLives]

Source: https://fi.zophar.net/soundfiles/gameboy-gbs/wario-land-3/18%20Colossal%20Hole%2C%20Cave%20of%20Flames.mp3

[Maelstrom]

Pretty great, can't seem to find any wrong notes.
I do, however, have 2 suggestions.
-Giving both hands the same dynamic leads to the RH being much stronger than it is in the original. I'd suggest making it piano vs mf LH and/or adding different expressive text to the bar
-Have you considered writing in the percussion as some sort of stomp/piano tap? You'd get the full intro and keep m17-18 from being the ghost town it is now. I'd leave it out in the rest of the piece though, like m4 and such.

[NineLives]

Okay! I've added the percussion and changed the dynamics! I also changed the amount of measures in the first two systems.

[Maelstrom]

While I'm sure the next person might have better advice on this, I would suggest moving the mf slightly closer to the bass cleff and the stomp/tap marking slightly further away. Just a smidge in all cases.

Gonna give this an approval in any case.

[NineLives]

Done and done!

[Bloop]

Looking great! Just a few tiny suggestions:
-m4, 8, 16, 22, 26, 34: Maybe you could add a courtesy accidental in the L.H. on beat 1?
-m11-13 and 29-31: Maybe you could add legato slurs to the L.H. where it plays legato, to further emphasize the legato-ness of the original.
-m20: You could keep the stomp on beat 3 (and maybe even a tap on beat 4), since the stomping foot (and the R.H.) still have enough time to play its part.

EDIT: I also changed the on-site name to the name you have right now. I don't think there's an official soundtrack for this game somewhere, so I went with zophar's track listing, which looks most official. For next time, please make sure to mention song title changes in your post, because we could've easily overlooked it :p

[NineLives]

Everything's updated!

For next time, please make sure to mention song title changes in your post, because we could've easily overlooked it :p

Sorry about that. I'll remember for next time!

[Bloop]

Great! Then I'll accept!
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[Maelstrom]

are you sure about that

[Bloop]

ohno zeta help me out here

[Zeta]

This submission has been accepted by Bloop.

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