[NDS] Mario & Luigi: Bowser's Inside Story - "The Wind is Blowing at Cavi Cape" (Replacement) by Tha

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Submission Information:
Series: Super Mario
Game: Mario & Luigi: Bowser's Inside Story
Console: Nintendo DS
Title: The Wind is Blowing at Cavi Cape
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: ThatHiddenCharacter


Replacement Information:
Links to Existing Sheet: MUS | MIDI | PDF
Replacement Type: Challenge (new arranger)

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[ThatHiddenCharacter]

[Bloop]

-m1-2: While these two measures are technically in Bm, it's very unusual to see a key signature for a section that's this short (just two measures). I think if you just keep it as D minor with sharps and naturals as needed, that's probably clear enough.
-m1: Maybe you could move the L.H. B on beat 4.5 down an octave, like in other measures?
-m6 and 18: I hear an A as a grace note before beat instead (instead of a C). Also, maybe you could just write the dotted quarter note of beat 1 as a half note: the player will probably lift their hand a little bit before beat 3 anyways. There are also other places where the melody cuts off before the end of the bar, but you haven't changed the note length there, so it's nice to be consistent about this.
-m12 and 24: It feels a bit weird to me to have this harmony pattern back in the R.H. for only one bar. It's not really feasible to include it before though, because it'd be in the way of the melody: personally I'd have considered leaving it out and just tying the D of m11 beat 4 in this whole bar.
-m13-16: Maybe you could add a slur to the legato notes in the R.H. (the first note in every bar). This makes it clearer they have a staccato dot missing.
-m16: The A of the R.H. on beat 3 is restruck in the L.H. on beat 3.5, so it doesn't have time to ring out. Re-holding the note on beat 3.5 won't sound great either. Maybe you could move the A and Bn in the L.H. down an octave, to keep the momentum?
-m24: The three repeated D's in the triplet on beat 4.5 are quite fast to play easily. Maybe you could do something like this instead:
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Octave tremolos are usually what I use whenever there are timpani rolls like these. I also tied the last note to the next bar: it will sound similar and will be easier to play than restriking the pinky of the L.H.
I included the 8va in this screenshot, but I actually think the L.H. might sound a bit better without it. The bassoon parts in m28 and 30 are very low like this, and because the bassoon and the bass note are only a third apart, it sounds really muddy this low.
Anyway, some tips for the 8va for the next time: make sure the 8 of the 8va starts before the first note. If you want, you can also change the 8va to an 8vb in the Smart Shape Options (select Octave Down in the dropdown menu, choose Select.., and look for the 8vb)
-m26-28 and 30-32: I'm usually fine with a second voice (the guitar) playing a little bit above the melody (the violin), but since the guitar plays above the violin for a long time, it starts to sound like the melody. Maybe you could move the guitar voice down an octave in these bars. I personally feel like it's easier to differentiate the legato top voice and the staccato lower voice too like that.
-m32: The R.H. here shouldn't be the same as m28, you can recheck the notes here ^^
-m33: Instead of a tempo, I'd write either "Tempo Primo", "q=127", or both. A tempo suggests that you go back to the tempo before the rit., which was q=100.
-m1 and 33: Maybe you could move the mf dynamic marking centered between the two staves: it's a bit high up like this.

[ThatHiddenCharacter]

Files are updated!

[Bloop]

Just a few small things, but I'll approve pending these!
-The rit.'s in m24 and 32 might look a little bit nicer centered above the first note, they look a little far left.
-The Tempo primo mark usually uses the tempo mark text font, which is Times New Roman 14pt bold.

[ThatHiddenCharacter]

-The rit.'s in m24 and 32 might look a little bit nicer centered above the first note, they look a little far left.

I assume you mean they look far right since they had to be moved left to be centered above the notes.

-The Tempo primo mark usually uses the tempo mark text font, which is Times New Roman 14pt bold.

I mean, Finale only has two font defaults for tempo alteration marks, neither of which are that, but I changed it to what you said anyway.

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[Bloop]

I assume you mean they look far right since they had to be moved left to be centered above the notes.

oops yeah that's what i meant haha

I mean, Finale only has two font defaults for tempo alteration marks, neither of which are that, but I changed it to what you said anyway.

That's true yeah, but Tempo Primo isn't treated as a tempo alteration, but as a tempo mark, like the Adagio or Allegro at the start of classical compositions.

Anyway, officially approved!
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[Kricketune54]

• I counted the starting tempo to be q = 126, 1 bpm less lol
• m1 LH 3.5 hearing this as C#
• m3 LH this recurring rhythm (every instance) beat 3.5 sounds like an E not F.
• Grace notes, typically slurs are used between the grace note and the note it applies to

Think that's all I've got to add though! Great job replacing

[ThatHiddenCharacter]

Updated!

[Kricketune54]

Cool, Kricketune used Accept

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This submission has been accepted by Kricketune54.

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