[GB] Wario Land: Super Mario Land 3 - "Stage Theme I" by Nine Lives

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Submission Information:
Series: Super Mario
Game: Wario Land: Super Mario Land 3
Console: Game Boy
Title: Stage Theme I
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Nine Lives

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[NineLives]

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[LeviR.star]

Wario Land 1 sheet?

[Zeila]

I like that you varied the octave ranges to switch things up

• m1 the top layer should be up an octave, and you're missing another harmony line
• m2 why is beat 1 a quarter note when beat 3 is an eighth note? I think beat 1 should be an eighth note to match everything else
• m6 beat 3.5 sounds like it should be accented; also for the RH it should be an eighth note instead of a quarter note, and maybe even staccato'd too (same goes for measure 18); additionally, I think it would be better to change the top notes in beats 1-2 to the missing part that goes C-D-D#-E instead of doubling the LH
• m16 RH last three notes should be D-E-F
• m17 LH beats 1 and 3 should be raised an octave if you want to continue the same voice line
• m18 LH beat 3.5 should be Eb(top)-G instead of E-B, and I think it would be better if the last eighth note was lowered an octave so it rises up to the C in the following measure
• m19 LH beat 4 Gb should be G instead
• m20 LH beat 4 should be F instead of E
• m21 LH you could add a G below the E and F if you'd like; also beat 2.5 shouldn't be tied and should only last an eighth note
• m24 RH beat 2 eighth note should be C-A instead of D-B [and that way it follows the chord too]
• m25 RH beat 1 should be staccato, and you should change the lower G to a B; the last two eighth notes should also be staccato'd, and if you're going to split the beams in the LH then you should also do it in the RH
• m25 LH beat 3.5 doesn't sound staccato'd
• m26 LH last three eighths sound like they should be staccato'd

[NineLives]

All right! Sheet's been updated.

• m6 beat 3.5 sounds like it should be accented; also for the RH it should be an eighth note instead of a quarter note, and maybe even staccato'd too (same goes for measure 18)

For this, I made the count an eighth note without accents on both hands.

[Latios212]

For m. 6 beat 3.5 LH, I'd suggest making that G a quarter note - it's held longer in the original. The same goes for the G in the RH of m. 18 beat 3.5.

Other stuff:
- I think the Eb in m. 6 might be better as D# (Gaug > C, the D# resolves to E in the next measure)
- G#s in m. 8 and 20 should be Ab's
- Ab in m. 11 should be G# (E7 chord)
- It's a bit difficult to follow some of the original lines since some of them were shifted around a bit to avoid collision, but the last three notes of m. 16 lead into the G in the left hand of m. 17 beat 1, so I would suggest lowering them an octave and putting them in the left hand
- Is there a reason why the LH part from m. 10 beat 3.5 until m. 14 beat 1 is an octave lower than it is in the original?

Lastly, you might want to consider clef changes for the low RH dyads in m. 1-2 and 23-24, but only if you feel it can be done in a way that doesn't look too weird messing up the contour of the parts.

[NineLives]

Mkay. The changes have been made.

[Latios212]

Cool. For the clef changes, they should immediately precede the first notes they apply to (the treble clefs you had were placed before an eighth rest).

Aside from that, the G#s in m. 20 still needed to be changed. I fixed those things along with the v26 articulation reset and approve!

[Maelstrom]

I have fond memories of playing this game on an older cousin's gameboy pocket when I was taken to a local baseball team's game instead of watching that.

LH first
m18 b3.5 - I hear this chord as a Ebdim/Gaug and the latter makes more sense, so write it as a B+D#

RH
m3 - I hear a C harmony below the b2/b4 Es here.
m5 - same deal, but only b2 and and if you want to leave it out to emphasize b4, that's fine. 
m7 - I hear a 3rd harmony on b4 here

Otherwise, it looks great. Nice job teasing apart the layers to make it playable without overlapping.

[NineLives]

Otherwise, it looks great. Nice job teasing apart the layers to make it playable without overlapping.

I'm glad you like it! Mkay, the sheet's been updated!

[Maelstrom]

Looks great!

Accepted

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