[ARCADE] Puyo Puyo - "Theme of Puyo Puyo" by LeviR.star

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Submission Information:
Series: Other
Game: Puyo Puyo
Console: Arcade
Title: Theme of Puyo Puyo
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: LeviR.star

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[LeviR.star]

[Libera]

In general looks really good.  Some small things from me:

-That is a pretty big stretch in bar 17.  I can play it (just) but many people wouldn't be able to.  You might consider writing in the lower octave as an option in small noteheads or something (although I realise that might be confused with your previous use of small noteheads...).  Maybe there's some other solution here like brackets or a note.
-The harmonies in bars 18-27 are a bit weird: sometimes they sounds like what you've written in and other times not.  I think there might be multiple harmony lines here which may be confusing me.  At any rate, my main point would be that it might be better to include the G#s in bars 19, 23 etc instead of the Bs, just because that way it outlines the harmony of the underlying E chord better.  It also sounds like it goes up to a B on beat 2.5 of bar 21 rather than staying on a G# there, and maybe the harmony drops down to a E at the start of the bar rather than doubling G#?  Honestly it's kind of hard for me to tell with the texture, but maybe something you could double check for me.

[LeviR.star]

Alright, I addressed Libera's comments over Discord with Static's help. Solved the tricky stretch with small noteheads, and re-wrote the right hand part in measures 18 - 27 entirely. Files are updated, sorry about the wait!

[Latios212]

Oh man, my ears do not like this soundfont ><

Just a couple of things I noticed while passing through:
- The indeterminate pitch noteheads you wrote in in m. 13-16 sound more to me like E's rather than B's.
- I don't think the use of the small noteheads for the E#s in m. 17 is clear. As Libera mentioned above it's unclear at a glance how these are different from the rest of the small noteheads you have for the percussive effect. Another thought, is the intention for large-handed people to play all three notes or omit the middle one? If the former, adding the upper E# makes it even more awkward to play. If the latter, that doesn't seem to be implied from what you wrote. My simplifying recommendation would be to just remove the lower E#s altogether.
- The DC's a bit far to the right.

(Small aside, I typically see "bassline" rather than "bass line".)

[LeviR.star]

Oh man, my ears do not like this soundfont ><

Just a couple of things I noticed while passing through:
- The indeterminate pitch noteheads you wrote in in m. 13-16 sound more to me like E's rather than B's.
- I don't think the use of the small noteheads for the E#s in m. 17 is clear. As Libera mentioned above it's unclear at a glance how these are different from the rest of the small noteheads you have for the percussive effect. Another thought, is the intention for large-handed people to play all three notes or omit the middle one? If the former, adding the upper E# makes it even more awkward to play. If the latter, that doesn't seem to be implied from what you wrote. My simplifying recommendation would be to just remove the lower E#s altogether.
- The DC's a bit far to the right.

(Small aside, I typically see "bassline" rather than "bass line".)

Did all of this!

[Latios212]

Looks good for the things I mentioned

[Static]

• m21 RH: An E was added to the chords on beats 1-2 to make the harmony sound a bit more full. I know over Discord we decided to leave out the lower notes for an easier sheet, but just adding the E doesn't require much motion from m20.
• m21 RH: The G# on beat 3.5 was replaced with F#.
• m23-27 RH: The lowest RH voice starting on beat 3.5 of m23 was changed to D-C#-D-E-D-E-C#-E-D-E-D.

Files have been edited and uploaded. (edit: approved)

[Libera]

Looks great, accepted!

[Zeta]

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