[GB] Kid Icarus: Of Myths and Monsters - "Final Battle with Orcos" by BrainyLucario

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Submission Information:
Series: Kid Icarus
Game: Kid Icarus: Of Myths and Monsters
Console: Game Boy
Title: Final Battle with Orcos
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: BrainyLucario

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[BrainyLucario]

I feel very unsure about the sharps and naturals, fyi

[Static]

7/8 time, nice.

• The forte marking should be moved down a bit so it's centered between the two staves.
• m1, 3 RH: The first dotted 8th note should be a Bb in both of these measures.
• m2, 4 LH: The C#s should be Dbs because it is descending the chromatic scale. The G#-Gn is OK because it's a temporary major 3rd moving to the minor 3rd, or at least that's how it sounds to me and how I would analyze it.
• m5-6 RH: The 2nd dotted 8th note dyad should be Gb-Bb, not Gn-Bn. The 3rd dotted 8th note dyad should be Fn-An. The repeating 16th notes should be Cn-Fn.
• m7 RH: D# should be spelled as an Eb because of the chromatic downward movement. The third dotted 8th should be a Dn. The lower voice in the repeated 16th notes should be A naturals.
  
• m5-7 LH: The bass line should go Bn, Bb, An. Then all the 16ths should be Fn, not F#. m7 is the same as m5-6.
• m5-7 LH: Any reason that only m5 is in octaves? It sounds like the next two measures have the same intensity as m5, so I'd just make it all octaves there.
  
• m5-7: Because the beaming of this particular 7/8 piece is 2+2+3, the beams in these measures should follow it. Right now, it's unclear where any beat except 1 is. Think of it like two separate bars of 2/4 + 3/8. The 2nd dotted 8th note should be a 16th tied to an 8th, and the 3rd dotted 8th note should be an 8th tied to a 16th. Here's what it should look like:
  
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[BrainyLucario]

Should have fixed all the listed mistakes and changes. Files have been updated my homies.

[Static]

Looks great! I have a couple more nitpicky things and that's it:

• It seems like there's 2 spaces between "Arranged by" and "BrainyLucario". There should be 1.
• Tose should be in the copyright info along with Nintendo.

[BrainyLucario]

Done

[Static]

Looks nice. Btw I edited the copyright info to your other Myths and Monsters sheets like you asked.

[BrainyLucario]

Thanks, glad I mentioned it to you

[Latios212]

sweeeet

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