[3DS] Pokémon X/Y - "Lumiose City" by braixen1264

[Bespinben]

Nice! Now we have some meat that we can pound.

Using layers when appropriate will greatly enhance the clarity of your notation. For example, instead of smashing everything together in layer 1 in m. 1-4, keep the melody distinct from your harmonies by using layers:



This doesn't always need to be the case, however. When the harmonies are in rhythmic unison with melody throughout a measure, it's often desirable to write both melody and harmony together in the same layer. Such is the case with m. 5-7.

Measures 5-7 have a different problem. Although they are layered correctly, the way the rhythms are spelled is redundant. It's not necessary here to show each individual beat in the RH, except beat 3. Therefore, it should be spelled as dotted quarter, 8th-tied-quarter, quarter. Apply this principle in m. 22, 25-28, & 30.

Also, remember to capitalize the URL (should read exactly as http://www.ninsheetmusic.org/), and add quotation marks around the Title of the arrangement.

[braix]

What should I do with the rests that show up on the second layer? Do I keep them in? I'm particularly confused with m.18-19

[braix]

Updated the links!

[Bespinben]

Erm?

[braix]

LOL WHOOPS
Fixing that now ^^"

[braix]

(new links are up)

[Latios212]

- Change game title to "Pokémon X & Pokémon Y", copyright to "Nintendo, The Pokémon Company, GameFreak © 2013"
- Those are some really big chords you got there in measure 12 and 17, toss the low B to the LH maybe in 12 and for 17, uh... take something out or roll it?
- Measure 12, beat 4 doesn't exist - it should be a 3/4 measure.
- Measure 8 and 18 you have a eighth tied to quarter in layer 1 and dotted quarter in layer 2. Change layer 1 to dotted quarter (like you have in the other measures).
- Measures 23-24, maybe incorporate some of the background voices for RH?
- Measure 30, you can combine layers.
- Measures 31-32, LH - Use dotted quarter again. Also is the voice really that low? Could we move it up an octave?

[braix]

Fixed. For those last measures I thought it sounded strange when I raised it up an octave so I added some notes is that okay?

[braix]

bump
anyone have more suggestions?

[Zeta]

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