[3DS] Tomodachi Life - "Divorce" by DaBluePipe

[Zeta]

Submission Information:
Series: Other
Game: Tomodachi Life
Console: Nintendo 3DS
Title: Divorce
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: DaBluePipe

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[XiaoMigros]

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Community members will leave feedback on the sheet, for you to implement (or not). Once 2 updaters give their approval, your sheet will be accepted and put on site in the next update!
I'll be your first updater for this arrangement.

• I believe you fixed every second note in the LH already, but I'm not seeing it changed in the files
• The dynamic markings are a little too far right, they should be visually centered under the notes
• The inverse mordent in m5 should be a regular mordent
• The stems in the lower layer of m2 should be pointing downwards
• Quarter rests in /4 time signatures shouldn't be dotted, but written as 2 separate quarter and eighth rests
• I feel like the 32nd notes would be better off written through a use of grace notes and/or ornaments, like you already use in certain places
• I think the grace note in m7 is also an E
• I hear the chords in the end a little differently, also I think starting the m10 one on beat 2.5 captures that fade in effect quite nicely:
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That's all from me for now, let me know if you have any questions!

[DaBluePipe]

Thank you for the feedback, I have adjusted everything accordingly. I have replaced two of the 32nd note areas with turns, but I'm not so sure whether that would be the correct ornament or not.

[Bloop]

The turns are the right ornament! Nice sheet, not a lot to say:
-m7: While the grace note is technically the correct ornamentation, I personally think it doesn't sound as pianistic: maybe you could do a mordent instead?
-m6-8: maybe you could add the strings and mandolin in the R.H. like this:
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-m9: You can write this quarter+half note in the R.H. as a dotted half note. Also, I don't hear that much of a dynamic shift between m9-12 and the rest of the song, so maybe you could leave out those dynamic markings?

[DaBluePipe]

I agree with all the changes so I went ahead with them. Thanks for your feedback!

[Bloop]

Awesome, in that case I can approve!
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[XiaoMigros]

• m6: Do you want to start the upper strings voice on beat 2.5 instead of 2, like you do in m10?
• The last note in the LH of m1 & m2 (and all similar places) should be the same as beat 3.5
• Your instrument name label is a little small, can you change the text size to 14pt? Double click it, then right click and 'Edit Full Group Name'. Select the text, then select 'Text/Size/14'
• If you want, you can expand the space between systems to cover more of the page, and move the first system down slightly.

[DaBluePipe]

I have updated it with all the changes you mentioned!

[XiaoMigros]

Looks great! Two more things, before I accept:

• Can you make the stems of the grace notes in m8 point downwards? Like this it's clearer that they're part of the second layer.
• Copyright: Are you mentioning 2 years because the game released in Japan early? For cases like this, we tend to stick with the earliest release date, so you can remove 2014 from the footer text.

[DaBluePipe]

I fixed the copyright, flipped the grace note stems, and removed the decrescendo.

[XiaoMigros]

Awesome! I went and flipped the slur on the grace notes for you, too. Congrats on your first accepted sheet!

[Zeta]

This submission has been accepted by XiaoMigros.

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