I need help proof reading this melody?

[QWertyuiop]

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=s0pTXnq13gE&t=26s

I have written the trombone/trumpet chorus/melody, however I am not sure if I have written all of it correctly.

Here is what I have so far!:

https://drive.google.com/open?id=1be7BJHZimmmJGyvRNSz1sudxsHh7s7jI

I think one or two notes are off at the end.

[sadpomoi]

though through thorough thought

[martiscore]

Haha, I'm still confused by these words, even THOUGH I learn English for 3 years. My younger sister studies punctuation worksheets, but literally, every sentence has one of these words, lol. By the way, why you wrote it here? The guy asked about his trombone/trumpet chorus/melody... However, the video is private for some reason, so unlikely someone will help him. Also, as I see, the thread is from 2019, so I don't think he needs advice now (but who knows?) I just hope he is doing good in 2021 to cope without proofreading.

[Khunjund]

The video you linked is private, so we can't access it.