In my ears, the pedal isn't being kept down steadily throughout the duration of the performance. In certain cases, it's best if the performer relaxes a little. You may use the unique shape highlighter to designate them. It would be simpler to understand the sentence if the whole note were included. The same logic applies to joining the m14 and m15 8va. If you wanted to, you could even add in the pad chords in m15-16 RH.
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