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#1
Looks good! I have a few notation things.

  • You are hiding beat 3 in a couple measures such as measure 4 and 11. You should have the quarter note as tied eighth notes.
  • I don't think the 8vb's are necessary. F is not hard to read with ledger lines. You have other F's throughout the piece with ledger lines.
  • Is there a reason you have the key change in the second measure? I think it would look cleaner to start out in the key and have accidentals in the first measure.
#2
Quote from: Latios212 on November 05, 2018, 03:47:52 PM- Last 6 measures: it'd be simpler to just leave the G#s spelled as Ab and A#s spelled as Bb since they're already present in the key signature.
- / at the end of the URL
Fixed!
#4
Quote from: Latios212 on November 04, 2018, 05:47:07 PM- Write the URL like this: https://www.NinSheetMusic.org/
- There's a lot of space on the pages but the staff braces and footer extend beyond the margins. Mind adjusting that?
- m. 40-41 are cramped especially compared to the following measures. May I suggest the following for distribution (or something of the sort) -

Fixed! Thanks!
#5
Quote from: Libera on November 04, 2018, 02:12:39 PMSorry for the wait on this!  Checking things now.

-Bar 14 and 22 the left hand the Ebs should be Ens.  My guess is that this was just a mistake when inputting the notes and forgetting the key signature, I do it all the time.
Fixed!

Quote-In the section bars 27-32 the higher notes are a fourth above rather than an octave.  i.e. they go C C C C Eb C Bb C etc.

I hear those notes as well, but they are an octave higher. I am going more for the effect rather than accuracy. I think octaves make it easier to play.

Quote-I feel like we're being a little inconsistent regarding the bends.  Sometimes you write them as graces, and sometimes just as semiquavers.  Is there a rationale behind the way in which you're writing them?

I used semiquavers when the bends are longer. I've made them a little more consistent in the updated sheets.

Quote-The mf on the top of bar 38 looks a little odd there on its own.  I'd move it back to the end of bar 37 so that crescendo all happens on one line.

Fixed!
#6
I think the sheet works fine and looks fun to play! I have a few comments on notation.
  • You should mess with the spacing of the notes so the half notes don't collide with the sixteenth notes, as in measure 12 and 21.
  • The quarter note in the left hand in measure 16 should be two tied eighth notes.
  • Regarding measure 1-4, I think the second half note should be flipped down. It makes it seem like it might be a third voice. Beat four should be flipped as well to match the top voice.
#7
Quote from: Latios212 on October 20, 2018, 11:54:05 AMLooks neat, but before checking pitches a few visual things catch my eye:
- Is there a reason beats 1 and 2 aren't beamed together in places like measure 3, or is that just because of Finale's default? It'd probably be best for them to be beamed similar to the left hand.
- Measure 28 and the following few look very odd because of the super long eighth note stems. How about trying to flip the main layer so that the beam is below the notes and the stems can be normal length?

I've implemented those changes. Thanks!
#9
  • You should fix any collisions with notes and other features. e.g. the mf in the first measure, octave lines clashing with notes, inconsistant ties near the end. etc.
  • I think the 15ma should be changed to 8va. The line then wouldn't be more than three ledger lines. The transition looks a huge leap between measure 68 and 69.
  • Check the stems of your notes. You have a lot of notes upstemed when they should be downstemed. Remember, anything higher than a B in treble clef should be down unless there are more than one voice.
#10
This looks like a fun piece to play! There are some little things I see with it.

  • The part where you have two voices with similar rhythms could probably be written in one voice. You can split them later when needed.
  • The rests in measure 70 look weird in the middle of the whole notes. It should probably be lowered.
  • I'm not sure if the glissandos are clear to follow the scale. Maybe you can notate with septuplets
  • The rests in the right hand in the last measure should be consolidated into one.
  • I'm not sure if you want to orchestrate more or keep it simple. I feel that that the brass line and woodwinds in measure 4 and similar would make it sound less static.
#11
The layers in this arrangement are confusing and are visually distracting. Measures 3 and 5 especially. There should be some way to fix this. The hand crossing seems weird too.
Sometimes the cross beaming is not necessary. The A-flat in measure 23 is distracting and should be in the upper staff, as is the D in measure 26.
#12
I would get rid of 8va in the bass clef line. This isn't often seen in piano music. I assume you probably didn't want to have many ledger lines. I think just keeping it in bass clef without 8va would be fine. Octaves can be assumed and are easy to read.
#15
I think the way you have the tempo notated, it has like a different feel. I think it would be better to halve the note values and have quarter note =65. That feels more "Calm."
There is a lot of collisions with notes, dynamics and repeat bars. It needs a lot of cleanup. The tempo change should help with the collisions in the left hand.
The left hand at measure 7 should stay in the bass clef. You have it correct in the rest of the piece.