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One quick thing I noticed, m10 is dotted, dotted, quaver and not a triplet

You wouldn't be able to play the middle voice

I was thinking something like this

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Any thoughts on including a detached or staccatos in the L.H.? I think it could use some.

I'm hearing the cello m2 b4 to m4 b2 and octave lower than in the sheet. Is there a reason why this isn't down the octave?

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•  Speaking of which, the pickup measure should be separated from the rest of the measure count (I will refer to measure #'s as is though)
• m8 RH I would recommend just writing this as a single layer, the dotted quarter note can just be a quarter note
• m9 You could add a trill to beat 3 Fn.
• m12 RH beat 1 you could add a trill to this note

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• bars 1-5 look scrunched up currently. Overall, I think 4-3-3-3-4 could be a better measure/system distribution for this piece.

Changed to 4-3-3-4-3, as m11-12 is better for squishing 4 bars a system than m13-16.

• for the pickup measure, there is a second line of notes you could add to the LH, or at the very least the drum part leading into m1.

I've added both, with the LH drum being more achievable. The second line in the RH is very virtuosic so it is in small notes.

• It's very hard to tell but I think m2-4 the first note is a Cb.

I'm pretty sure its an F. I at least don't hear a symmetric Cb Eb Cb on 0.5x speed

• m5 RH beat 4.66 I hear a Cn 8th note as a pickup into m6

I'm not quite hearing a Cn, I can hear an arpeggio leading up to m6 m5, is it part of that?

• m6 second layer I hear the following screenshot (can clean up layers a bit)
• In m7 RH 2nd layer I hear the Fn restrike twice with the Fn and Cn above it on beats 2.33 and 2.66. Then for beat 3 to end it sounds like the notes played by this clarinet part are just an octave down from the melody.

I don't hear the Gn in your screenshot but there were major discrepancies, so I've taken a much closer look at those bars. I think the LH is F root not C root, but either inversion with an F root doesn't capture the accents in m6 well.

• m10-11 RH I am not sure I hear the notes you have outside of the last two 8th notes of each measure. What are the other RH notes based off of, partwise?

RH is based off of arpegiating high strings playing quaver chords. The strings are a lot less prominent in the actual recording than I expected. (I have been cross referencing a MIDI dump, might not do that again). They can also be heard vibing on the same chord m1-4.

• m10 LH very subtle but on beat 2.66 I hear a separate Eb leading into beat 3

Good catch. I hear it on b2.5 like the An in m9.

• m14-15 LH you probably could work in a second layer, similar to m12-13

Added the strings in m14-15. The bass in m12-13 also can and has been added in a few other bars.

-m14 (and similar): It's a bit hard for the player to have the R.H. run on beat 4 end on the chord on beat 1 of the next measure

I've been looking at this run. Playing through I was doing thumb on Ab which isn't bad, but another option could be thumb on Gn, and turning 4 over 5 for the Eb: (2,3,1,2,3,4,5,124 (Eb) or 134 (Cmin)). Either way the bottom Eb in m24 b1.0 seems unreasonable to play.

I think including some fingering in m14, what ever you decide, would be a good idea.

Changes all look good.

I'm not too sure on these which is why I didn't comment the first time.
m17 I'm hearing Dbmaj7 sound for the first beat and a half-ish, and would change RH to CFAb.

I hear a harmony m17 b4, might be Gn or Cn in upper LH, but either sound a bit off to me, and its fine without it.

This might be overly explicit, but m5-14 the LH could use staccatos b1 and b3 and a tenuto b4. (or just add articulations m5-7 and add simile)

I'm hearing the end of m3 as a triplet not tresillo.

m15-16,19-20 I'm hearing the horns replay b3 on b4. If it doesn't look too detached, could have the LH replay the same notes on b4.

In m34-37 I was planning on doing some cross stave beaming to show the melody in the LH, but it doesn't look that feasible in NotePad

Welcome to the piece where the melody is almost never in the top RH.

The Ties in m24 I don't think I can fix in notepad.

This is a fast tempo, so lmk if anythings too hard. (Repeated notes m5-8, octaves m14,m22)

Megalovania from Super Smash Bros. Ultimate has misplaced Staccattos in m31 and m32 specifically.
No other misplaced articulations.

https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/pdf/4328

Happy with the changes, and have updated the files.

Can I suggest F# in the last bar instead of Gb, because its scalic motion in Gmajor.

Implemented all your slur suggestions.

About the horizontal offset in m13 and 15, I actually do usually move the up-stemmed notes a bit to the right so they don't clash with each other. In this example it's not too crazy, but moving just a few ticks to the right doesn't impact readability that much, so I don't mind making that edit for you if you want ^^

Yes please! (I have since noticed this in one of my pieces that I am currently learning as well, Spoon River arranged by Grainger)

-m10 and 14: When there's no second layer above or below the notes (like in beats 1-2.5 here), staccatos should go on the notehead side of the notes. -m12: I hear a low F on beat 4 in the bass

Changed these.

I've knowingly uploaded the Musescore PDF for now, because there are a lot of things that haven't been ported over to finale, and having the cleaner score is better for now.

Courtesy Db m13 is to make sure you don't sight read a Gmaj chord.

I did have more explicit rhythm markings in m1-14, but replaced it with more on beat notes and rhythm ad lib. Open to any and all suggestions here.

m21-22 Instead of an 8:18 polyrhythm here, I changed the LH to match the percussion more. Should I bring that style all the way from m15-22, so there isn't a sudden texture change?

m25 I'm happy to add 8vb, or bass cleff for the low notes. Leaning towards 8vb.

There are a few key pedal lifts that I want to notate (m43, m79). I'm not sure the best way to do this.

In game the name displays as "cat" but on the album it is titled as "Cat". I'm not sure what you would prefer for the site. I've also included "(Music Disc)" as some of the other Music disc titles are fairly non-descript eg. "5".