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Title: PDS' Arrangements - (NEW 6/17/16) Kingdom Hearts 2; Friends In My Heart
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on June 23, 2015, 11:59:31 PM
Welcome to the land of pokemon sheets!

Pokemon Colosseum
Pyrite Building-  MUS (https://www.dropbox.com/s/dtebajozi0cb8iy/Pyrite%20Building%20MUS.mus?dl=0) MIDI (https://www.dropbox.com/s/jo5dtguogco3qz3/Pyrite_Building%20MIDI.mid?dl=0)  PDF (https://www.dropbox.com/s/918ny92gyrvsmln/Pyrite%20Building%20PDF.pdf?dl=0)
Cipher Syndicate Theme-  MIDI (https://www.dropbox.com/s/3dcsob0y9wit0cx/Cipher%20Syndicate%20Theme%20MIDI.mid?dl=0)  MUS (https://www.dropbox.com/s/wc9frivn10scih1/Cipher%20Syndicate%20Theme%20MUS.mus?dl=0)  MUSX (https://www.dropbox.com/s/66rz4mmeoid5683/Cipher%20Syndicate%20Theme%20MUSX.musx?dl=0)  PDF (https://www.dropbox.com/s/4cftl91srtzoaco/Cipher%20Syndicate%20Theme%20PDF.pdf?dl=0)

Pokemon Red/Blue/Yellow
Recovery Theme- MUS (https://www.dropbox.com/s/p3kfibxw2e836l0/Pokemon%20Recovery.mus?dl=0) MIDI (https://www.dropbox.com/s/khnupi3u7vdp129/Pokemon%20Recovery.mid?dl=0)  PDF (https://www.dropbox.com/s/tu0n80precj1ii4/Pokemon%20Recovery%20PDF.pdf?dl=0)

Runescape
Arabian- Click me! (https://www.dropbox.com/sh/83fuecmxkyozax5/AADUVCKXoO4HD3cv4j-_g4eOa?dl=0)
Baroque Click me! (In progress) (http://=https://www.dropbox.com/sh/3wcn8kp0ewfjmb4/AADQhjBib0igo5awWSnfEC32a?dl=0)

Fallout: New Vegas
Begin Again  Click me! (https://www.dropbox.com/sh/s3cu5ezpa98sn6m/AAAcStyxAlL6TQxJ6GCY48rAa?dl=0)

Kingdom Hearts 2:
Sunset Showdown  Click me! (https://www.dropbox.com/sh/cix1pls4tjn58vb/AADO8PQo3xE8yH0yQibVhmUHa?dl=0)
Waltz of the Diamonds  Click me! (https://www.dropbox.com/sh/cce400exqhu9160/AADfrWXZ-iWiqgOcAlJMZx_3a?dl=0)
Friends In My Heart  Click me!  (https://www.dropbox.com/sh/7qbjey954kyh9f5/AACBS_uwDa3SvsXGGMTD-uOSa?dl=0)
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis'
Post by: Brawler4Ever on June 24, 2015, 06:44:16 AM
This looks really good! General formatting stuff aside, I do have some comments.

-Measures 3-5 should repeat themselves before moving on to the rest of the song.
-In measure 17, the notes in the RH and LH aren't aligned, as they should be. If you change the 16th note to a grace note, that'll fix the problem. The same thing happens in the last measure. The first A of the RH should be a grace note. They should also end on the same beat as the first chord played in the middle staff. That can be done by changing both G's to a quarter note, instead of an eighth note.
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis'
Post by: Tobbeh99 on June 24, 2015, 07:14:52 AM
Try using dropbox for sharing your arrangements. It works really well! :)
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis'
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on June 24, 2015, 10:51:55 AM
Quote from: Brawler4Ever on June 24, 2015, 06:44:16 AMThis looks really good! General formatting stuff aside, I do have some comments.

-Measures 3-5 should repeat themselves before moving on to the rest of the song.
-In measure 17, the notes in the RH and LH aren't aligned, as they should be. If you change the 16th note to a grace note, that'll fix the problem. The same thing happens in the last measure. The first A of the RH should be a grace note. They should also end on the same beat as the first chord played in the middle staff. That can be done by changing both G's to a quarter note, instead of an eighth note.
Fixed the issue in 3-5, but I'm confused about 17. Here's the original score:
Spoiler
https://www.noteflight.com/scores/view/015eb8650f4fb6874dd6d48e8a8e7dd4479b870d
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Do you mean the 16th note A to the B flat? Because in the original it is notated that way, though I can see xml files doing something weird to it. Either way, I'll take a look.
Also, I found an error myself, with the last two chords (timing was off).
Many thanks for all your input!
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis'
Post by: Brawler4Ever on June 24, 2015, 11:58:28 AM
This is what I mean (https://www.dropbox.com/s/dpqwnvcn374841m/Pyrite%20Building%20Ending.mus?dl=0).

Yeah, converting from xml removed your grace note. The timing was off in the original mus version that you posted. And it seems that the measure numbers between the mus and xml version are also different. In the original, I was referencing measure 19, but in the mus version, it's 17. Yeah, that conversion really messed with your sheet. :P
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis'
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on June 24, 2015, 12:37:57 PM
Quote from: Brawler4Ever on June 24, 2015, 11:58:28 AMThis is what I mean (https://www.dropbox.com/s/dpqwnvcn374841m/Pyrite%20Building%20Ending.mus?dl=0).

Yeah, converting from xml removed your grace note. The timing was off in the original mus version that you posted. And it seems that the measure numbers between the mus and xml version are also different. In the original, I was referencing measure 19, but in the mus version, it's 17. Yeah, that conversion really messed with your sheet. :P
Ah, I see. I notated that originally, was changed during conversion. For now, I've removed that note entirely, as it isn't mandated, just a little grace that makes it feel slightly more jazzy. I'm going to work with someone (Xaoz) over Skype and see what I can do...
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on June 26, 2015, 01:21:43 PM
New stuff!
Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: Explorers of Time/Darkness
A Grand Tale of Time and Darkness-  MUS (https://www.dropbox.com/s/a4gasj9xh2k8twy/A%20Grand%20Tale%20of%20Time%20and%20Darkness%20MUS.mus?dl=0)  MIDI (https://www.dropbox.com/s/79weaz811ionz4u/A%20Grand%20Tale%20of%20Time%20and%20Darkness%20MIDI.mid?dl=0) PDF (https://www.dropbox.com/s/ltn3rwfqps5y6u6/A%20Grand%20Tale%20of%20Time%20and%20Darkness%20PDF.pdf?dl=0)
(Now I wait for Bespinben to rip this one to shreds :3)
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements
Post by: Latios212 on June 26, 2015, 01:22:55 PM
Quote from: Pianist Da Sootopolis on June 26, 2015, 01:21:43 PM(Now I wait for Bespinben to rip this one to shreds give it the magic touch :3)
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on June 26, 2015, 01:57:11 PM
Personally, I feel that gives way too much credit to me, to even have something worthy of a 'magic touch'  ::) It's not really that great XD
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements
Post by: Bespinben on June 26, 2015, 02:43:04 PM
Quote from: Pianist Da Sootopolis on June 26, 2015, 01:21:43 PMNew stuff!
Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: Explorers of Time/Darkness
A Grand Tale of Time and Darkness-  MUS (https://www.dropbox.com/s/a4gasj9xh2k8twy/A%20Grand%20Tale%20of%20Time%20and%20Darkness%20MUS.mus?dl=0)  MIDI (https://www.dropbox.com/s/79weaz811ionz4u/A%20Grand%20Tale%20of%20Time%20and%20Darkness%20MIDI.mid?dl=0) PDF (https://www.dropbox.com/s/ltn3rwfqps5y6u6/A%20Grand%20Tale%20of%20Time%20and%20Darkness%20PDF.pdf?dl=0)
(Now I wait for Bespinben to rip this one to shreds :3)

The shredder
Quote from: Bespinben on June 26, 2015, 12:57:13 PM~Ah friendly friends~
I'm going to try my best not to let my overwhelming nostalgia influence this critique (and by that, I mean I usually go overboard to the point of micromanagement when stuff like this shows up). Before I destroy your morale however, I do want to compliment you for having made, in my opinion, one of the most detailed sheets I've ever seen come out of NOTEPAD, of all programs.

The majority of this comment will focus on arranging issues.

1.) Unnecessary 3-staff notation ~ A skillful use of layers, solid/dashed lines, and other voice leading devices could have kept this all neatly on 2 staves.
2.) Lack of ornamentation notation (where applicable) ~ The figure in the LH of m. 1 leading into measure 2 is a flourish that could be abbreviated with a trill. This would prevent messy 32nd notes cluttering the score.
3.) Missing harmony/countermelodies ~ M. 8-13 have WAY more lines than just bass and melody unison. You started off strong in measure 7 with that bombastic AbM7 chord, but then it seems you quickly fizzled out after that.
4.) Registration of voices ~ Measure 19+ is where I have the most gripes. The ostinato just doesn't sound right at all transposed several octaves down as a LH accompaniment. A model I think would better reflect the serenity of that passage would be to have RH on the ostinato, and the LH playing the long-tone bass + melody + choir ahs.

Side-issues:
*There are 5 composers for this game (none of them being Tsukasa Tawada), namely: Arata Iiyoshi, Hideki Sakamoto, Keisuke Ito, Ryoma Nakamura, & Ken-ichi Saito
*For the copyright, I would recommend including Nintendo, Pokémon Co., and Chunsoft.
*Recheck your transcription of the trumpet lines in m. 4 leading into m. 5. The B should be a C.
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Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on June 26, 2015, 03:12:58 PM
Quote from: Bespinben on June 26, 2015, 02:43:04 PM
The shredder
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Re-doing the sheet now.
Many thanks for the well thought out critique!
Disclaimer- the flourishes, I agree, should've been written as trills. The reason I didn't was because the program I'm using (noteflight) doesn't actually play out trills.
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on July 03, 2015, 10:53:23 PM
New sheet- Es Cade's Theme, from Pokemon Colosseum!
(Y'know, that fat mayor?)
Plot of a 2003 game
HE WAS EVIL
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MIDI (https://www.dropbox.com/s/8uw21atz4zto7mt/Es%20Cade%27s%20Theme%20MIDI.mid?dl=0)  MUS (https://www.dropbox.com/s/m0yv3d124koig0i/Es%20Cade%27s%20Theme%20MUS.mus?dl=0)  MUSX (https://www.dropbox.com/s/81mdl9udxa42z65/Es%20Cade%27s%20Theme%20MUSX.musx?dl=0)  PDF (https://www.dropbox.com/s/6h7b0650z4yso94/Es%20Cade%27s%20Theme%20PDF.pdf?dl=0)
Thoughts?
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements
Post by: Brawler4Ever on July 04, 2015, 08:13:41 AM
I apologize for my musical ignorance, and I hope that what I am about to say will make at least a little sense. The only suggestion that I have is in regards to measure 2. In the actual song, there is a connection of notes between F and A, and then again between D and F. I believe that it's a glissando that connects them? Not entirely sure, and I can't recreate the effect with Notepad, for whatever reason. :P

I managed to (kind of) recreate the same effect with two glissandi on just the A and the second F (https://www.dropbox.com/s/afjv3x1sxd8empb/Es%20Cade%27s%20Theme.mus?dl=0). However, I don't believe that this is the "proper" way of doing it. Anyway, I hope this helps!
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on July 05, 2015, 08:05:08 PM
Quote from: Brawler4Ever on July 04, 2015, 08:13:41 AMI apologize for my musical ignorance, and I hope that what I am about to say will make at least a little sense. The only suggestion that I have is in regards to measure 2. In the actual song, there is a connection of notes between F and A, and then again between D and F. I believe that it's a glissando that connects them? Not entirely sure, and I can't recreate the effect with Notepad, for whatever reason. :P

I managed to (kind of) recreate the same effect with two glissandi on just the A and the second F (https://www.dropbox.com/s/afjv3x1sxd8empb/Es%20Cade%27s%20Theme.mus?dl=0). However, I don't believe that this is the "proper" way of doing it. Anyway, I hope this helps!
I see what you're saying. I'm not sure how else I'd recreate that, other than what you did, but I'll play around with it in Finale.
Many thanks!
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements - (NEW) Cipher Syndicate Theme!
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on July 09, 2015, 07:05:17 PM
New arrangement!
Cipher Syndicate Theme-  MIDI (https://www.dropbox.com/s/3dcsob0y9wit0cx/Cipher%20Syndicate%20Theme%20MIDI.mid?dl=0)  MUS (https://www.dropbox.com/s/wc9frivn10scih1/Cipher%20Syndicate%20Theme%20MUS.mus?dl=0)  MUSX (https://www.dropbox.com/s/66rz4mmeoid5683/Cipher%20Syndicate%20Theme%20MUSX.musx?dl=0)  PDF (https://www.dropbox.com/s/4cftl91srtzoaco/Cipher%20Syndicate%20Theme%20PDF.pdf?dl=0)
(I know I didn't do any of the formatting stuff yet, just wanted to get general advice)
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements - (NEW) Cipher Syndicate Theme!
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on August 29, 2015, 10:31:18 AM
New arrangement! I've decided that instead of putting the individual file links here, I'll just leave the zip here and you can unpack it how you please.
Arabian- ZIP (https://www.dropbox.com/sh/83fuecmxkyozax5/AADUVCKXoO4HD3cv4j-_g4eOa?dl=0)
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements - (NEW) Cipher Syndicate Theme!
Post by: Maelstrom on August 29, 2015, 10:53:23 AM
Uhh.......
That's not exactly a zip.
It's just a link that lets you select the files in the folder

Anyway, a little feedback:
-I think the baseline could use a little improvement, especially in the last line, but I am in no position to speak about it because I can't find the thingy that lets me use my headphones (long story).
-Maybe some dynamics. At least an initial one. Maybe some crescendos and diminuendos at 21-29
-nitpicky, but inconsistent note beaming at m28
-might want to check the note beaming in 6, 8, etc.
-One measure system. ew.
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements - (NEW) Arabian
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on August 29, 2015, 10:55:28 AM
Wow. My dynamics are totally awful here, you're right.
Yes, the one measure system is disgusting.. I'll see about fixing it.
And yeah I got my file names wrong. Not sure what that is.
Question though- what would you change about the note beaming? Not my area of knowledge by a longshot.
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements - (NEW) Arabian
Post by: Maelstrom on August 29, 2015, 11:15:07 AM
Quote from: Pianist Da Sootopolis on August 29, 2015, 10:55:28 AMQuestion though- what would you change about the note beaming? Not my area of knowledge by a longshot.
File types: Well, you may have made a zip, but it opened it instead of downloading it, like it might for MLF or Olimar's arrangements. You'll have to ask them how they do it, as I have not been able to figure it out yet.
Imo, it's easier not to use them, because you can just replace updated versions of files in dropbox and it won't break the link, provided they shared a file name and adress.

Well, the goal of note beaming is to show the beat. So that second quarter note would be an eighth tied to an eighth.
I am probably not the best person to teach note beaming, as I go overboard with fixes all the time. But that one's a textbook example of what it shouldn't be.
Another thing you should never do is have a dotted quarter, dotted quarter, quarter in 4/4.
But you probably knew that.
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements - (NEW) Cipher Syndicate Theme!
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on August 29, 2015, 11:51:19 AM
Duely noted.
Updated files available here (https://www.dropbox.com/sh/zjldvgmbkzvff80/AAC9o9sN9pRpAfC0JyVBxuJra?dl=0).
Title: Re: Pianist da Sootopolis' Arrangements - (NEW - 12th March) Runescape & Fallout
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on March 12, 2016, 12:26:28 PM
Posting again, for the first time in

....Jesus

Over 6 months. Damn.

Anyways, here's an in-progress arrangement. Baroque, from Runescape
Files are here! (https://www.dropbox.com/sh/3wcn8kp0ewfjmb4/AADQhjBib0igo5awWSnfEC32a?dl=0)

Here's the original.

I'm just having a little trouble arranging the last section. If anyone has ideas for what the LH should do, feel free to offer them!


Here's the other arrangement I've done in the meantime- "Begin Again", from Fallout New Vegas.
Files (https://www.dropbox.com/sh/s3cu5ezpa98sn6m/AAAcStyxAlL6TQxJ6GCY48rAa?dl=0)

Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements - (NEW) Cipher Syndicate Theme!
Post by: Zeila on March 12, 2016, 12:53:11 PM
The runescape one is Begin Again, so you should fix your dropbox folder
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements - (NEW) Cipher Syndicate Theme!
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on March 12, 2016, 12:56:29 PM
They're working fine for me, even after logging out of dropbox and on another computer. Are you sure you got the right one?
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements - (NEW) Cipher Syndicate Theme!
Post by: Zeila on March 12, 2016, 01:07:12 PM
Yes. The title of the folder is Baroque, but the files are Begin Again
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements - (NEW) Cipher Syndicate Theme!
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on March 12, 2016, 01:15:14 PM
Ah, you're right. Here's the fixed link: https://www.dropbox.com/sh/3wcn8kp0ewfjmb4/AADQhjBib0igo5awWSnfEC32a?dl=0

Updating the OP and other post.
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements - (NEW) Cipher Syndicate Theme!
Post by: Zeila on March 12, 2016, 02:58:57 PM
I don't think you have to update the link if it's still the same folder. I believe the file url remains the same (unless you rename it)

I have some feedback along with suggestions for Baroque:
Link to folder (https://www.dropbox.com/sh/ovglvaaqoxy1qt5/AAAcj5PJOykLfSxcDmdN5bJIa?dl=0)
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements - (NEW) Cipher Syndicate Theme!
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on March 12, 2016, 09:39:04 PM
Many thanks. Taking these files and fixing them up further. Thanks for all the helpful comments, my fellow RS arranger!
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements - (NEW) Cipher Syndicate Theme!
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on March 30, 2016, 06:48:58 PM
New arrangement! Kingdom Hearts 2 this time.

Files are here. (https://www.dropbox.com/sh/cix1pls4tjn58vb/AADO8PQo3xE8yH0yQibVhmUHa?dl=0)
Title: Re: Pianist Da Sootopolis' Arrangements - (NEW) Cipher Syndicate Theme!
Post by: Th3Gavst3r on March 30, 2016, 07:49:03 PM
Quote from: Pianist Da Sootopolis on March 30, 2016, 06:48:58 PMFiles are here. (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oc3vhEo6YEE&index=5&list=PL19D566F984B8FEEB)
Directs to the YouTube video
(Same in OP)
Title: Re: PDS' Arrangements - (NEW) Kingdom Hearts 2; Sunset Showdown!
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on March 30, 2016, 07:53:48 PM
Goddamnit stop being stupid PDS
Fixed.
Title: Re: PDS' Arrangements - (NEW) Kingdom Hearts 2; Sunset Showdown!
Post by: Th3Gavst3r on March 30, 2016, 08:36:04 PM
That's more like it :)
Am I wrong in thinking this should be mostly in D minor? I'm just taking every E natural as a hint lol
Also I think you forgot the copyright info
Title: Re: PDS' Arrangements - (NEW) Kingdom Hearts 2; Sunset Showdown!
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on March 30, 2016, 08:43:56 PM
Ah, that I did forget it.
It's tonic of G, though. Rather than tonic of D. Probably some sort of modal writing.
Title: Re: PDS' Arrangements - (NEW) Kingdom Hearts 2; Sunset Showdown!
Post by: Th3Gavst3r on March 30, 2016, 09:13:24 PM
Ok cool, I definitely can see a G tonic around measure 25 but I was iffy about the rest, thought it might be a switch from D to G minor. Trying to train my ear better but stuff like this still gets me I guess
Great arrangement though, definitely brings back a chain of memories
Title: Re: PDS' Arrangements - (NEW) Kingdom Hearts 2; Sunset Showdown!
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on March 30, 2016, 09:23:41 PM
Oh gawd that pun tho
Title: Re: PDS' Arrangements - (NEW) Kingdom Hearts 2; Sunset Showdown!
Post by: Th3Gavst3r on March 30, 2016, 10:00:23 PM
Sorry, I know nobody likes puns. It's just this game is sorta close to my heart
Title: Re: PDS' Arrangements - (NEW) Kingdom Hearts 2; Sunset Showdown!
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on March 31, 2016, 07:42:22 AM
Quote from: Th3Gavst3r on March 30, 2016, 10:00:23 PMSorry, I know nobody likes puns. It's just this game is sorta close to my heart
I'm dying
But FYI I'll be doing a lot more arrangements from KH soon.
Title: Re: PDS' Arrangements - (NEW 4/7/16) Kingdom Hearts 2; Waltz of the Diamonds
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on April 07, 2016, 07:52:08 PM
New sheet!
Waltz of the Diamonds (https://www.dropbox.com/sh/cce400exqhu9160/AADfrWXZ-iWiqgOcAlJMZx_3a?dl=0), from KH2.
Title: Re: PDS' Arrangements - (NEW 4/7/16) Kingdom Hearts 2; Waltz of the Diamonds
Post by: FireArrow on April 07, 2016, 09:39:25 PM
Seems a bit bare-bones. You can afford to add a bit more elsewhere since the parallel 6ths in m37-40 are significantly harder than the rest of the relatively easy piece.
Title: Re: PDS' Arrangements - (NEW 4/7/16) Kingdom Hearts 2; Waltz of the Diamonds
Post by: Th3Gavst3r on April 07, 2016, 10:13:40 PM
Also noticed you were a bit half-hearted with the ghost notes; there are many more than what you marked
Title: Re: PDS' Arrangements - (NEW 6/17/16) Kingdom Hearts 2; Friends In My Heart
Post by: Pianist Da Sootopolis on June 17, 2016, 07:46:03 PM
Hey that waltz of the diamonds thing I never finished
anyways

New arrangement, from the same game. "Friends in My Heart"!
CLICK ME OR BURN (https://www.dropbox.com/sh/7qbjey954kyh9f5/AACBS_uwDa3SvsXGGMTD-uOSa?dl=0)
Title: Re: PDS' Arrangements - (NEW 6/17/16) Kingdom Hearts 2; Friends In My Heart
Post by: Onionleaf on June 20, 2016, 02:00:39 AM
Lovely piano arrangement, with a well-known theme and easy to play - should be quite popular to download (I sure will!) :)

Just noted a few small points:
• I'd probably add some phrasing to the left hand instead of the "legato" mark - might need to space out some staves to do that, but you have plenty of extra space for that.
• Do the "simile" markings relate to the alternating dynamics? I don't really hear them in the original song, perhaps some articulation changes, or a wave-like cres. & dim. for each phrase (like you have in mm 10-13) would be better?
• There are some pizzicato strings playing in the background in the 2nd half of the piece, might be worth adding those in to the 2nd layer in the left hand.

Oh, and I only now realised you have some Runescape arrangements listed. :D I had a look at your "Baroque" work-in-progress, and thought it was a neat interpretation of the song. I have a super old music sheet printed out of it, but it is simpler to play so once yours is completed, I'll be sure to try playing yours.