Submission Information:
Series: Pokémon
Game: Pokémon Black Version & Pokémon White Version
Console: Nintendo DS
Title: Icirrus City
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: braix (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=3791)
Replacement Information:
Links to Existing Sheet: MUS (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/mus/1827) | MIDI (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/mid/1827) | PDF (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/pdf/1827)
Replacement Type: Challenge (new arranger)
yooo the sheet is readable now!
Can I suggest F# in the last bar instead of Gb, because its scalic motion in Gmajor.
Sorry for a bit of a wait here.
• If you wouldn't mind, could you upgrade this sheet to the latest NinSheet template? would apply to both the notehead style and tempo marker
• We usually recommend that if staccatos are on the stem side, to adjust the setting so the staccato is centered over the notehead.
• The measure spacing on page 2 I think works a little better visually as 4-3-3 measures per system, though I think it also might be good to move the final system of page 1 (m17-20) to page 2 as well (doing some evening out of page 1 spacing)
• m6-7, m14-15 2nd RH layer beat 2.0 should line up with the 1st layer notes instead of being a bit forward.
• m18 RH missing slur on grace note
• m18 and m22 RH you could move the 8th rest down to the typical 8th rest height within the staff.
• m20 RH 1st layer, last two 8th notes I would remove the staccatos as they are longer. Could also do for the second RH layer. You could also widen this measure as the staccatos of layer 2 are going inside the LH stem.
• m20 LH hearing 1st note as an En
• m25 RH I don't really hear the Bn in layer 2, but I do hear an F#. could replace Bn with an F# (also avoids the collision with layer 1 dot on the half note)
• m30 RH the Gb would actually make more since being written as F#. Given the song is in G major, most times the accidentals are going to be sharps. This change also makes more sense given there are no Fn's afterwards.
Thank you for the feedback. All suggested changes should have gotten addressed.
• m6 beat 1 both Gn's should be up an octave, and m8 beat 1 the Fn's (match up with m2 and m4). Basically same four measure LH pattern of m1-4 applies for all the measure until m17, and then again for m27-30
• Couple other smaller things you could address - there's a lot of empty space at the bottom of page 1, you could either distribute the systems a bit wider, or maybe look to move one of the systems on pg 2 over. And on pg 2 the system at the top of the page is a bit high relative to the header info (could lower it with a couple tabs down).
Gonna hold off for now but marking for myself later, some of the 2nd notes seem a bit difficult in the RH, might look to suggest making some modifications or or dropping some notes in second voice parts where it's a bit too difficult to do runs and manage the thumb also reaching to restrike a pitch