Submission Information:
Series: Kirby
Game: Kirby Super Star
Console: Super Nintendo Entertainment System
Title: Dynablade Overworld
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Yug Guy (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=4424)
Replacement Information:
Links to Existing Sheet: MUS (http://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/mus/182) | MIDI (http://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/mid/182) | PDF (http://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/pdf/182)
Replacement Type: Challenge (new arranger)
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Name should be changed to "Dynablade Overworld"
Awesome, glad to have a replacement for this one!
Notes look right, although there are a handful of missing/misspelled tones:
- B's missing in the first chords in m. 3
- Db's in m. 3-4 should be C# (A7 chord)
- Gb in m. 5/6 should be F# (major ninth over the E bass)
- D missing in chord in m. 9
- I think F# would make sense in m. 10 (leading into Gn)
- C's missing in chords in m. 10
- Bb missing in first chord in m. 11
Cosmetic:
- Collapse the first chord in m. 4 into one layer
- Unbeam the eighths when you have them on beats 3.5-4 in m. 10/12/14.
- Two eighth rests in m. 14 should be a quarter rest
- https
Should all be fixed.
Cool, almost there:
- LH notes between beats 3.5-4 are still beamed together in 10/12/14
- Last thing I'm noticing is inconsistency between LH/RH beaming in m. 13/15. Be consistent and beam them together over that beat 4 rest, or alternatively disconnect any beams that extend over a beat 4 rest in measures 1/5/7/11/13/15.
Since you're unbeaming all eighth note pairs from beat 3.5 to 4, I feel like you might as well just unbeam everything that spans across beats. That's my preference, anyway.
The only other suggestion I have would be to add a grace note to m17 RH beat 1 (either Cn or C#; I think I prefer C# a bit more but either works).
Quote from: Latios212 on May 07, 2020, 03:06:34 PM- LH notes between beats 3.5-4 are still beamed together in 10/12/14
- Last thing I'm noticing is inconsistency between LH/RH beaming in m. 13/15. Be consistent and beam them together over that beat 4 rest, or alternatively disconnect any beams that extend over a beat 4 rest in measures 1/5/7/11/13/15.
My bad. I thought you were referring to the RH in your previous post.
Quote from: mastersuperfan on May 09, 2020, 12:02:20 AMThe only other suggestion I have would be to add a grace note to m17 RH beat 1 (either Cn or C#; I think I prefer C# a bit more but either works).
Done.
Quote from: Yug_Guy on May 11, 2020, 04:36:35 PMMy bad. I thought you were referring to the RH in your previous post.
Done.
No worries! Yeah just be sure to be consistent.
Measure 1 still remains to have its beams broken; everything else looks good.
Quote from: Latios212 on May 11, 2020, 06:06:20 PMMeasure 1 still remains to have its beams broken; everything else looks good.
u got it dude
noice
M.16 beat 4 is a G7b9 chord, so the G# would actually be spelled as Ab.
Quote from: Bespinben on May 12, 2020, 05:31:00 PMM.16 beat 4 is a G7b9 chord, so the G# would actually be spelled as Ab.
It's always the little things, isn't it?
double noice
This submission has been accepted by mastersuperfan (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=3561).
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