Submission Information:
Series: Fire Emblem
Game: Fire Emblem: Three Houses
Console: Nintendo Switch
Title: The Night of the Ball
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Nacho2420 (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=37)
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Hey, long time no see! Glad to see new stuff from you, from 3H no less ;D
This looks solid at a glance (aside from the measure numbers!). I would strongly recommend using more measures per system - this can very easily fit onto 3 pages as much of it is very spaced out right now.
Just taking a peek at the beginning right now, since I actually had started writing this one out myself (you can see it here (https://www.dropbox.com/s/z8m0qb4k89wpc92/The%20Night%20of%20the%20Ball.musx?dl=1)). One thing I'd suggest thinking about is seeing if you want a denser accompaniment pattern by including more of the harmonies from the original - I think this would better capture the richness of the strings. Up to you, though, as your arrangement does a fine job at outlining the harmonies (minus a couple of nuances here and there, like the seventh (A) in m. 14).
More feedback to come later :)
Arranged by Latios212??
Whoops! I used one of his arrangement mus files as a template so I didn't have to fill in all the text manually/format it and forgot to change that part!
Edit: Changes were made - condensed the arrangement to fit 3 pages, removed excess measure numbers, added and adjusted harmonies to make it fuller
Cool :) checking notes and the rest now! I'm not the best with super dense orchestrations like this, but overall it looks good.
- Raise the quarter rest a bit in m. 3
- I think an A# would make more sense than a Bb in m. 12. Similarly, sharps in m. 28.
- Not sure I follow the LH in m. 21. I think I'm hearing something like A F# E for the eighth notes?
- Might be nice to have the high piano chord roll in m. 32
- Slur and tie overlap in m. 43
- lower layer eighth note misaligned in m. 44
- I think the D# in the chord in m. 47 should be an E?
- Would suggest adding a slur to the last note leading back to the beginning of the loop
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I reached out to Nacho - he's been busy and said we're free to make edits... I'll see if I have time to make edits on this one in the next week or two.
Quote from: Latios212 on June 28, 2020, 08:49:04 AMI reached out to Nacho - he's been busy and said we're free to make edits... I'll see if I have time to make edits on this one in the next week or two.
Edits I shall make then:
- m12 is an F#maj chord, so the Bb should be A#.
- m14/29 are B7#5 chords (augmented 7th chords), so the Gns should be Fxs.
- m16 RH: I hear the F# in the top layer tied to beat 3, and I don't hear the last grace note. Beat 3 itself sounds like a 16th-dotted 8th rhythm to me. Maybe someone else can double-check this, but that's what I hear at least.
- The slur in m22-24 and 27-28 is shaped kinda weirdly.
- m28 is an A#m7 chord, so the LH should be A# and G#.
- m39 beat 3 to m40 beat 2 sounds like 3 triplets, all F#-C#-B moving down an octave each time.
- m42 LH beat 3.5 should be Gn instead of G#.
- The slur is crossing the tie in m43.
- It seemed like there was a lot of space on the bottom of page 1, so I moved the systems down some.
Files have been updated accordingly. Edit: Also made the rest of the edits Latios suggested above. I'll be
approving this one now.
Quote from: Static on April 17, 2021, 11:56:34 AMm16 RH: I hear the F# in the top layer tied to beat 3, and I don't hear the last grace note. Beat 3 itself sounds like a 16th-dotted 8th rhythm to me. Maybe someone else can double-check this, but that's what I hear at least.
Yep, this sounds right to me as written.
A last few edits before accepting:
- Adding a p dynamic on the last note for the loop back to the beginning, lowering dynamics a bit to be closer to the midpoint between the staves
- Giving the rolled octave in the last measure a little more space on the left
This submission has been accepted by Latios212 (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=4344).
~Zeta, your friendly NSM-Bot